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wow that was awsome ..please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

angel

Just found your story and very much enjoying it. Will be looking for updates.

I really like this story. I love when Hermione has a hidden secret and powers.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

Excellent. I look forward to reading more.

Excellent!! I cannot wait to read more. I kind of like this less confident take on Hermione since she is usually so head-strong and bossy. Keep up the great work and please update soon I want to know what is going on with the "Trio".

Chapter 5:


This is the best you have done. I am going to assume that either A) you slowed down and took the time to think it through and write it out without the rush or B) you got a really good Beta reader to look it over and help you out. At any rate, which ever one you did, keep doing it. Good job.


S_G

Excellent. I can't wait to read more.

I like it. Can't wait for more. Please and thank you.
And Happy B-day!!!!!! ^~^

I did not get on the 'bash jasmine bandwagon' because it seems like you have a lot of negative reviews and that's frustrating and demoralizing for a writer. I don't want you to give up. With every chapter you write, your writing will improve, but it takes conscious effort. You have several reviewers who have generously offered their time and talent to beta your fic. I would take one of them up on the offer and use it as a learning experience. Betas and reviewers can point out consistent mistakes. If you know where your problem areas are then you can become a stronger writer by learning from them - even simple things like capitalizing the personal pronoun 'I'. But reviewers shouldn't have to point out mistakes this glaring. Ideally your piece should be polished enough that the grammatical errors won't detract from your story. After all, you want people to read and review your fic for the content of your story and not the poor quality of your writing. I know it's agonizing to work on polishing a chapter when all you want to do is hit the publish button. Trust me, I'm a very slow writer. Just becuase I'm posting now doesn't mean I haven't been working on my fic for nearly a year. Take pride in your work and take time in your editing. A final piece that is well put together and readable is much better than hastily published chapter notes. Your reviews will improve with the quality of your writing. AFF is a very supportive environment. Everyone wants to see you do well. We all love reading good fics. Give us a good fic Jasmine. Post something you're proud to publish.

And for heaven's sake - correct the spelling errors in your Title and Story description! First impressions count.