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February 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great, Severus finally got it.. at last!! And Harry's not that far behind either still... so let's rock n'rol!!
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February 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Thank you so much for the two wonderful updates, as always they were a treat to read.
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February 17, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Finally!! Snape confessed his relationship with Lily!! ^^
Although I must admit, Umbridge is one scary-ass toad lady!!
Keep up the great work!
Although I must admit, Umbridge is one scary-ass toad lady!!
Keep up the great work!
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February 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
thank you, author. harry and snape's relationship is very unique. i like it very much!
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February 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well, that really done some good at last. I love how you portray their growing feelings for each other the way they absolutely DON'T figure out what they're feeling might be because it's completely outside of any range of possibilities they are considering. And in turn we all know where it's headed and can't wait to get there, while you dangle it in front of us like that. Just, extraordinary writing...
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February 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awww... their embrace on the roof was so wonderful. You've made the rest of my day. ^^
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February 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
about #16....
1. In the words of Lucy from Charlie Brown, ''Aren't they the CUTEST thing!''
on a scale of 1-10, the ''Awww..'' factor was a....8 1/2. You can do better than
that.
2. So, what DOES 'Inter Vivos' mean???
3. On the story idea, from what I'm thinking I think it would be best in the tone
of how 'Changing of the Guard' was like, a little bit of drama...a little bit of
witty sarcasm.
As a matter of fact, it WOULD be best told from Draco's POV, because I've noticed that you see more through Draco's eyes than Harry's. Besides, this is about Slytherins wanting just bit of R-E-S-P-E-C-T.
It would be like a little lesson in irony...and I'll let you figure that one out.
Now, here comes the stretch of the imagination, what moves could Draco do?
Hmm....good question, here's an answer.
Let's say Draco is on good terms with his father and during the summer, Draco
flew with his father to the States, since he had business over there and Draco IS
curious to know what it's like over there. While over there, Draco comes across the wonderful, but BRUTAL sport that is football and he's amazed at how similar it is to Quidditch.
It would be fascinating because first he's watching it on television and second, he's having a brief, but brilliant epiphany on how to train his Beaters & Chasers.
Oh, by the way, might as well make Draco captain of the Quidditch team,
otherwise it wouldn't work as much. Plus, if you don't know much about football have a guy do a mini commentary of a recent game for you on paper, then do some changes. ANYWAY that's just part of how to get it started.
Then, you fill in the blanks.
NEXT, comes the Quidditch matches and Gryffindor is surprised by how Slytherin is giving them a run for their money. There are just TOO many close calls, but Gryffindor is still winning because of Harry's Seeker skills.
Then, you fill in the blanks.
NEXT,...and this is your decision on how you would fit this in....Draco sees on
television again, or magazine with moving pictures, moves & twirls performed by gymnasts/divers and wonders how he can incorporate those moves on a
broom. As a matter of fact, Lo' you could invent a move solely ''created by'' Draco
that would go into Hogwarts: A History. :-)
But, it has to be grand. Oh, Then, you fill in the blanks.
NEXT, somewhere in there, you develop a romance. Hmm...how would you
do that and it wouldn't involve drama? Well, that IS what makes a good writer
how to create a romance when the atmosphere ISN'T charged with angst & drama.
...and I'll end it here for now. So, does that help if you go for it?
1. In the words of Lucy from Charlie Brown, ''Aren't they the CUTEST thing!''
on a scale of 1-10, the ''Awww..'' factor was a....8 1/2. You can do better than
that.
2. So, what DOES 'Inter Vivos' mean???
3. On the story idea, from what I'm thinking I think it would be best in the tone
of how 'Changing of the Guard' was like, a little bit of drama...a little bit of
witty sarcasm.
As a matter of fact, it WOULD be best told from Draco's POV, because I've noticed that you see more through Draco's eyes than Harry's. Besides, this is about Slytherins wanting just bit of R-E-S-P-E-C-T.
It would be like a little lesson in irony...and I'll let you figure that one out.
Now, here comes the stretch of the imagination, what moves could Draco do?
Hmm....good question, here's an answer.
Let's say Draco is on good terms with his father and during the summer, Draco
flew with his father to the States, since he had business over there and Draco IS
curious to know what it's like over there. While over there, Draco comes across the wonderful, but BRUTAL sport that is football and he's amazed at how similar it is to Quidditch.
It would be fascinating because first he's watching it on television and second, he's having a brief, but brilliant epiphany on how to train his Beaters & Chasers.
Oh, by the way, might as well make Draco captain of the Quidditch team,
otherwise it wouldn't work as much. Plus, if you don't know much about football have a guy do a mini commentary of a recent game for you on paper, then do some changes. ANYWAY that's just part of how to get it started.
Then, you fill in the blanks.
NEXT, comes the Quidditch matches and Gryffindor is surprised by how Slytherin is giving them a run for their money. There are just TOO many close calls, but Gryffindor is still winning because of Harry's Seeker skills.
Then, you fill in the blanks.
NEXT,...and this is your decision on how you would fit this in....Draco sees on
television again, or magazine with moving pictures, moves & twirls performed by gymnasts/divers and wonders how he can incorporate those moves on a
broom. As a matter of fact, Lo' you could invent a move solely ''created by'' Draco
that would go into Hogwarts: A History. :-)
But, it has to be grand. Oh, Then, you fill in the blanks.
NEXT, somewhere in there, you develop a romance. Hmm...how would you
do that and it wouldn't involve drama? Well, that IS what makes a good writer
how to create a romance when the atmosphere ISN'T charged with angst & drama.
...and I'll end it here for now. So, does that help if you go for it?
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February 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
con't..
Whoa!!! O_o
BIG Mistake alert!!! BIG..BIG Mistake!!!
I didn't mean 'Changing of the Guard', I meant 'A Potion named Desire'.
Whoa!!! O_o
BIG Mistake alert!!! BIG..BIG Mistake!!!
I didn't mean 'Changing of the Guard', I meant 'A Potion named Desire'.
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February 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I was surprised when I read that Hermione and Ron knew that Draco and Harry were still friends and were just pretending. I must have missed that before. But I'm really glad that they reconciled so much sooner than I anticipated. Also, I really enjoyed the interaction between Severus and Minerva and how Severus learned a few things he should do from that conversation. (She tended to put everything into generalities and abstractions and theories, and Harry was interested in putting what had happened as far from him as possible whilst he still dealt with it.) This line and the one after this about Ron, really struck me. Which is why I was so happy for the words that Draco spoke. Narcissa is so awesome and it would be really interesting if things were nonviolent, and Narcissa could just meet Harry. Wonderful job with this chapter.
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February 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
about #15...
I have a plot idea I want to throw your way, please consider it for a POSSIBLE
story.
I was reading the section on the Quidditch match and how Draco was musing on
how Harry was good on a broom AND how good some of the Gryf' players were.
Okay, that's all well & good, BUT no matter how good you are most of the times,
is it possible you can mess up a few times?
So, this story idea popped up.
*What if Draco realizes that the reason the Gryffindor team are good, because of the fact, they work as a UNIT. No matter how much the Gryffindors get on each other's nerves or fight, they are comfortable with each other.
Which is completely different from how Slytherins are. Meaning...since the children come from aristocratic pure-blooded families, the mentality would be something
close to ''all about me'', which Draco displays the most. Therefore, even though the
Slytherin team play together, they are busy using underhanded Slytherin tactics
to crush the other team, instead of developing their strengths & relying on each other
to strengthen their weakness...and watching out for their fellow team mate.
Plus, Draco needs to learn a different way to fly against Harry. I don't know if
it's because of the fact Harry is smaller since he is fast, but Draco needs a new technique where he would HAVE to be daring for a change.*
ANYway, that's what came to mind.
What do you think? :-i
I have a plot idea I want to throw your way, please consider it for a POSSIBLE
story.
I was reading the section on the Quidditch match and how Draco was musing on
how Harry was good on a broom AND how good some of the Gryf' players were.
Okay, that's all well & good, BUT no matter how good you are most of the times,
is it possible you can mess up a few times?
So, this story idea popped up.
*What if Draco realizes that the reason the Gryffindor team are good, because of the fact, they work as a UNIT. No matter how much the Gryffindors get on each other's nerves or fight, they are comfortable with each other.
Which is completely different from how Slytherins are. Meaning...since the children come from aristocratic pure-blooded families, the mentality would be something
close to ''all about me'', which Draco displays the most. Therefore, even though the
Slytherin team play together, they are busy using underhanded Slytherin tactics
to crush the other team, instead of developing their strengths & relying on each other
to strengthen their weakness...and watching out for their fellow team mate.
Plus, Draco needs to learn a different way to fly against Harry. I don't know if
it's because of the fact Harry is smaller since he is fast, but Draco needs a new technique where he would HAVE to be daring for a change.*
ANYway, that's what came to mind.
What do you think? :-i