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for Drinking in the Halls

by ronsmistress

person alina290
schedule January 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very intense last chapter. It does sound like you could add more to it though. I hope you think about that.
Liz
schedule January 6, 2009 at 12:00 AM
What a sweet story! Really liked the description of Ron learning...
schedule December 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
@ch. 1. Good set up...I like Pansy drunk. lol. Kinda funny...and I can so see the Draco/Colin situation. Snicker. I also like how you're portraying Ron. You're Ron/Pansy stories are really engaging.
schedule December 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
@Ch. I'm glad that she apologized to him....and how she did it was hilarious. Very cute using Hermione as a translator of sorts. I like how slow you're taking it, and how Ron is a virgin. Maybe Pansy can help him out? : ) Good characterization with Dean and Seamus as well : )
schedule December 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
@ch. 3. Awww..Ron's so cute, and Pansy's being really patient and supportive. I like how she's taking it slow with him. You probably would benefit from a Beta, sometimes I get a little confused about who is saying what because you put head movements/gestures with dialogue that belongs to another person. Other than that, this is really fun, and I can't wait until they do "the do".
schedule December 31, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LOL@Ch. 4. You almost had me until you introduced Snape....now you know Ronald Weasley would never confide in Snape, and I'm not sure Snape would ever care. But it was a interesting conversation. Nice build up at the end...looking forward to see what they get up to.