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As I was reading this my cat, who was laying in my arms sleeping, perked up, walked over to the screen and appeared to be reading it. It was quite entertaining to say the least. It was a great chapter as always. I read every chapter as soon as you put them up, but I read on my phone and the thing only puts in 10% of the reviews I write so I stopped. But know that you have an avid reader. I am really enjoying this Snape, everyone tries to make him out all lovey dovey and that just doesn't work for him. He is crass manipulative and not above getting his hands dirty.
Can't wait for the next update,
KP

Love the story. Love how you captured Snape but feel really bad for him. He did everything Harry asked and still got nothing. Just curious are you going to keep piling things on Snape until he just flips out and walk down Diagon alley waiting for someone to kill him or are you going to finally have Harry get a clue and start dealing with his kids?

Oh wow, I wonder when it will ever get better...

Yay, awesome plan! I wonder how Snape will do.

I found it really ironic how Snape was yelling at Harry about not eating his food or drinking his tea and that Harry was being overly paranoid then a minute later he was planning on doing just that with the love potion. How does he figure Harry would eat or drink anything he gives him if he wouldn't even accept un-poisoned tea?

Hope harry knows some charms to find poisons.

I think the kids are reacting properly to Snape. If I had kids and was forced to marry I would hope they would do the same thing to that poor sucker.

It was his fault for getting into that situation. He should of done his research. I hope for another chapter soon!

Yay, loved!!!

Darn. No more to read.

I will be honest first. The beginning seemed a little rushed. It was too much at once, and could easily be skimmed by without much loss. It's a problem I have with my own writing, and the main reason I still haven't read the first Harry Potter book, so please don't think I'm meaning to be harsh. The overall premise was good, however. A little less ranting, or something to slow the pace a little in places that could use it would make quite a bit of difference.

Later chapters I think were better formed, but you also had room to expand it without the fire of the other two. The pacing is nice and creates something that sets a more realistic image of how and when things are happening.

The singing head made me remember my own childhood amongst those songs, including a 6th grade teacher who played along with us as the entire class sang the song that never ends during a rainy-day recess. Once in Disneyland on a field trip the teacher threated that if any of us were late to a meetup checkin, they would be subjected to the Small World ride with her. I really did feel sorry for Snape. And the cauldron had me dying. It almost seemed like something Hermione would pull.

So far, so good. I look forward to future chapters.

Uiuiui... Loved the chap!

Love the story just floored by how bad of a parent Harry is. Ginny must have been the "mean" parent. My four year old nephew cleans up after himself (not well but he does). Harry now knows they lie to him and have done things to Snape but still doens't look like he's going to punish them at all. Snape is still snarky but even without the floating heads I can see why he's getting to frustrated. I hope he steals all their toys while they sleep.

Harry really is a horrible parent and well on the way of raising spoiled brats for kids. The talking heads thing has really gone on long enough too.