rate_review Reviews

Excellent work. You should write more of this pairing. :D

Very nice :]
I really liked this

All in all a very nice story. I thought you could have gone further with it. Made it meatier. As I stated in my other reviews, I thought the chapters could have been longer. But if this works for you, go for it. My one real big problem with the story was the ending. I'm sorry it felt like it was missing something vital. It almost felt as if it was a throw away ending. Like you saw the end of the tunnel and sprinted for it rather than walking and taking your time to do so. If there are two things that the reader will always remember it these two things--the beginning and the ending. If you give the readers a half worked ending, that's all they will remember. So all that time and effort you spent on the body of the piece is forgotten because you wanted it to be over. I can tell you are a good writer. You need to work on this. But like I said, it's a good story. I hope to read more of your work in the future.

Good start. I wish that the chapters were just a bit longer, but the length that you have works. I'm just greedy.

Okay, just read chapter two. Wow. I like how you brought Remus back. Nice.

Chapter 3. HOT!

Chapter four. You really believe in keeping your readers on pins and needles, huh? LOL!

Chapter Six. I like your Remus.