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Short but certainly important! So neither of them is as cold as they'd like to be and people to believe... They don't hate each other, either. That certainly changes everything!

Excellent!

Hello there,
I just wanted to let you know that I'm also enjoying your story and waiting for further chapters. So far it's very nice (I like the slow progress), the plot promising and quite uncommon. But his self-imposed imprisonment makes me worried. I hope that you have REALLY good reason for it because I've got a few ideas and they are... far-fetched at best. I would hate to read something so trivial in such a promising story. I hope you'll surprise me in a positive way.
wish you lots of good ideas,
Belle

Fantastic, fantastic! Good job! I truly love this story! Thank you so much!

Hermione's sure the sharp one. That's a fairly brilliant invention that her *ahem* dear husband could certainly benefit from. Oh, and:
"As most Hogwarts graduates couldn

OHOHOH, and I want to know--when are the pickled walnuts going to come into play?

Hi, I've been reading this story since you first posted and I only chose to write a review now (after chpt.7) and I have a couple comments:

-- Your chapters are a bit short. I find you could have combined the chapters along the way to create longer ones. For example, chapter 6 and 7, could very well have been one chapter -- as they are the same thought, same place, same scenes, just different settings. Does that make sense? It's like the wedding, then the next hour of her 2 hours. There doesn't need to be two chapters to seperate two hours of time in your story.

-- I find that your story is progressing rather well. I'm def. interested. Though I wasn't sure I would be after the first chapter, but I kept coming back out of curiosity. I want to see what direction you will take this. Will he ever be free? Who will fall in love first? Her? or Him? Will they ever actually fall in love at all?

Otherwise, good show so far.
Update soon :o)

Very nice twist.

Ah, so her involuntary respect for his humanity is interfering with his self-imposed penance, is it? He can let his pride eat at him later, when she's cleaned up conditions that a jihadi wouldn't inflict on a prisoner. Business marriage or not, they now have a partnership, and she will make it work, despite his emotional baggage. I do hope she brings him some new bedding, though.

I don't see anything wrong with the length of the chapter. It was like the perfect dress--long enough to cover what's important and short enough to attract interest. Nice *snifflesob* moment there with the razor. Freakin' sweet. Tugged at my heartstrings for sure. Of course, there really can't be any tender moments there--it has to be a grungy, stinky, yelling deatheater/prisoner, and they just don't make for kodak moments.

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