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Chapter 9: This chapter was a turning point. In Hermione

I'm crying my heart out here. It's pure agony on the screen! It's heartbreaking, and I really don't understand it. I'm not a mother, and I honestly don't think I have a maternal bone in my body... but it still has my chest tight and my eyes wet.

I don't know how you did it, after everything you went through in real life... I get the impression that Hermione is a bit 'watered down' so the emotions aren't quite as violent for the readers, I've no idea how you managed with your own grief!

My parents told me how bad it was when I was born 9 weeks early at 3lb3oz and had to fight for every breath while my Mum was in intensive care with pre-eclampsia. My Dad had long auburn hair at the time - and it went snow white in three days because of the stress, then it all fell out and grew back the original colour again... listening to THEIR stories of my birth are bad enough, Mum gets really emotional and Dad goes really quiet. My first photo is when I'm 10 minutes old and you can't see me for all the wires and tubes connecting me to all the machines keeping me alive. There was a little boy in the incubator next to me, he was 2lb2oz, even earlier than I was... one day when Dad came to visit me (after visiting Mum) the little boy wasn't there and his incubator was disinfected. We presume he didn't make it. It was touch and go 21 years ago at 9 weeks early... but they wouldn't batter an eyelid at keeping a baby born at 21 weeks alive now. Its amazing how technology has advanced.

Yeah, it could have been a completely different story in our family if the trainee midwife hadn't made a mess of taking my Mum's blood pressure and asked the senior midwife to take it and double check... the double checking revealed my Mum's blood pressure was rediculously high and approaching deadly (even higher than what the trainee had said). I was born within the hour of that diagnosis.

All my love, and remember that there's three who did make it - and how wonderful they are.

x

Wow... You were right in the need to have tissues ready. Especially after this last chapter. I do hope you post more soon as I enjoy all of your stories and have read them several times each.

Keep writing and I will keep reading. :)

loved this chapter. It tore at my heart, though. Beautiful writing. How many chapters will there be in all? I'm also going to a midnight showing of Twilight- I'm really excited. Hope you have a great time, too! And can't wait to see what happens in the next update!

Ah ha!
So this is that the Lucius/Hermione story you were mentioning in "The Potions Master's Baby." I found it!
Well, no, I just took the time to click on your profile and see if added anything new to this category yet, LOL.

It's a solemn, but lovely story so far. I like the relationship you developed so far between Lucius and Hermione. As with all your stories, its the same, but unique for the subtle differences. And each time, there are somet traits you keep the same with all your characters.

Luicus was rather sweet taking Hermione out to dinner, I like that about him in this story. His arrogance hasn't shown through...as yet. But will it? I don't think it fits in with this particular storyline though. I see him as being bruised, not broken, and not outrightly arrogant. At least not outrightly arrogant to her.

I have to tell you too, I especially enjoyed reading his conversation with Narcissa. His responses to her were very classic and it made me think. Hmmm, if only a guy would talk to me like that. Well, no. Not in that context actually, but you know what I mean. That wit and charm that bites just a little bit. Argh! Please tell me why fictional men aren't real?

So I'm listening to the new Enya CD, "And Winter Came" while I was reading your story...it makes perfect background music, let me tell you! You should seriously have a go at listening to a track or two while reading back your own story! Especially, two tracks -- "Last time by Moonlight" and "The Ghost of Christmas Past." I suppose it also helps that your chapters are short and I'm a quick reader :o)

Can't wait for the update, as always, am taking my thesis writing break w/ your stories!
Much love!

I have finally started reading this story, and as usual you deliver excellent work! I especially (and I think I have done so before) want to thank you for you habbit of submitting the first 5 chapters in one go, and thus allow us to be familiar with the fic, and even more so for submitting completed fics!
I feel sorry for most of the characters, and though I usually love Ron-bashing I will give him some excuses for his behaviour due to the loss of Oliver (if he in any way hurt Hermione, the excuses will dissapear like snow on a hot stove). You make an excellent portrait of those involved and I am looking forward to read more!!!

its a great story

A very moving chapter. Where my Grandad and two Uncles are buried (one was 18 and the other on his 22nd birthday - within 40 days of each other in different car accidents on the same stretch of road back in 1965 - my Nanna, Mum and the rest of the family were indeed devastated, how my Nanna coped I do not know - to this day their memories are kept alive in the family) are a row of baby graves, quite often we come across parents in their grief, it is heartbreaking to see. I don't think parents ever get over the lose of a child, whether a baby or fully grown, it is not the natural way of things to pass after your children and I think that makes it harder to bear. You've written Hermione's emotions so well, I hope it was cathartic for you to write. I'm looking forward to where this is going, can already see this is going to be an emotional roller coaster.
Lu
xx

I am reading this chapter at my mum's and poor thing is very confused as to why I am sobbing at her computer. But I agree that angst can be cathartic, both reading and writing. With he way things are going in my life, it's good to read about a much deeper hurt than my own. So, once again, thank you for a wonderful chapter.
I hope you have fun at the Twilight premier. My very large group will be geeking out till the early morn with homemade Tshirts and vampire related snacks. Yeah, I'm that bad.

This chapter (9) brought me to tears. I have been extremely blessed to have carried both of my pregnancies to full term (going into labor on my due date with my daughter and being a week late with my son) but the fear of losing a child was (and still is) always there just beneath the surface. I can only imagine what you went through with your babies but I am glad that you were able to...continue living for them and that you are now able to work through this with this story. Seeing how my two favorite characters are interacting with each other, learning about the state of their own marriages... It is easy to see how they can end up coming together. They are both very needy in this story, even if they don't come straight out and say it (and you don't either) but I can see it there. The need to be accepted. The need to be forgiven and to forgive. The need to be loved and to feel like they actually matter in the world. It really is hard to be in a relationship where the other half sees you not as a spouse and lover but rather a room mate and caregiver. (however that can be taken) I can not wait to see how this plays out.

Excellent work!