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Great start mate, first off I would like to say that could you make Harry the more dominant one, as I think it would be great.

I like that Harry and Hermione is having an affear.

I like the first smut, can't wait to see more, please update soon.

Could you read my story when you got time.

very good story. i like it just the way it is. i hope they both get caught. that would be fun to read.

cant wait to read more
please update very soon

Holy crap that was hot! :D

Everybody's pretty much known that Harry really loves Hermione (slashers say Draco or Severus) while Ron really loves Luna.

Ooh! You could write a chapter with Luna as part of a threesome. :)

Harry&Hermionefan (Email Hidden) 2008-11-10 id # 3001245817
The story could have been interesting if it where not an affair fic. So it is just plain boring. A waste of time and space.

your empty criticism is a lack waste of time and space. just because you didn't like it doesn't mean its dull and meaningless. I on the other hand had quite enjoyed the intro and hope the summary would unravel it's self once the story line gets deeper

The story could have been interesting if it where not an affair fic. So it is just plain boring. A waste of time and space.

Okay, I'll weigh in on plot vs. porn. I will always prefer PW/P if it's done well, however, straight up porn is just fine if you're sticking to solid characterization and some good reasons your protagonists are together. I like your premise of each chapter exploring another kink with our heroes, but if it's going to extend beyond a certain amount, I would recommend some plot to keep the story interesting and moving forward. As long as this suggested take-down of the Ministry doesn't become too convoluted and distract from the action happening in the bedroom, then it could work out fine. If you discover that you are spending entirely too much time trying to work the details, I would hasten to keep it too a minimum so that we can enjoy each escapade between Harry and Hermione. Now that you've mentioned it, of course, I'm really intrigued to see where this will all go. I love Harry/Hermione affair fics, especially when the sex is raunchy and perverted. I've commented this before, but I see these stories as a nice hand gesture to JKR. The idea that her chosen partners for them didn't quite work out and that Harry and Hermione get each other on same basic carnal level that Ron and Ginny don't understand always amuses me.

I would be careful with Hermione, though. Unless you're going to give us some backstory to illustrate Hermione's change from harpy to horny, then I'd watch you don't go too far astray from her character. Personally, seeing as her bossy nature has always slightly antagonized Harry, having her take it to extremes for sex and getting a completely different reaction out of him is well worth writing about. Good luck. Nice intro.