rate_review Reviews

I vote for the spacing. In books, if they don't have spacing, you can at least figure out where you are by the section of the page. On the computer, it's quite hard to figure out what line on what paragraph you're on. I tend to skip most unspaced stories because squinting is annoying.

Mmmm, shirtless Ron. Poor Pansy. I like how she's not particularly confident (so few teenage girls are) but not a shrinking violet either.

Food flirting. That's cute. Usually in fanfics only one person flirts via food, while the other person gets aroused and grumpy. I think Ron should have carried her to the loveseat instead of the bed though, if he wasn't trying to scare her.

I like that Ron's a virgin and he got his sex education through romance novels. From his confidence earlier, I assumed he was experienced; virgin!Ron who isn't horrible in bed is a nice change of pace. I don't think guys ever talk about foreplay if they talk about shagging girls though, so I'm not sure that Draco can be considered bad in bed just due to his comments. Unless he's not gushing over specific body parts, indicating that he doesn't even notice them.

I really like the Molly/Arthur and Parkinsons subplots. I think I'd like to see more indication of the softness in Molly, even though I like that she flips out about the marriage and thinks nasty things about Pansy. I'd also like to see more interaction with their friends. Why didn't they confide in anyone about the job (which was pre-Pansy) or about a possible wedding? It just seems rather odd to me. The bit with Misty's adorable.

I'm normally a Ron and Hermione shipper, however Ron and Pansy go so well together that I htink no one can complain. Please continue, I love this story and its romantic and (so far) optimistic. The whole subplot involving the Weasley's and the Parkinson's is interesting. By the way kudos to the cliffhanger ending, I hope Pansy and Ron stick together no matter what.

I definitely think you should keep spacing it out. I like the format you're using. I like the idea of there being a lot of diversity amongs groups after the fall of the Dark Lord. So this must be A/U since the Slytherins don't seem to be in trouble for their role and everyone seems very happy. I love the idea that Pansy tried Draco and he doesn't do anything for her. LOL@ Hermione having her second time with Fred and George. Go Hermione. Interested to see what happens with her and Ron, he seems to be quite in touch with his surroundings and Pansy's attentions.