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RE: chapter twenty-four

Hmm, with the survivors putting a disillusionment charm on themselves prior to going onto the rooftop during the daytime, I hope that they are clever enough to cover ALL windows with dark substances to prevent light leakage and be a possible draw for whatever... you know?

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Mmm-mmm-mmm, lucky girl to have had such a kind, loving, and gentle boy/man as Viktor show her the ropes on relations between the sexes. It is really too bad that they drifted apart over the years.

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Aww, it was so sweet of Narcissa to sing praises of her son, Draco, and basically give him to Hermione to protect and love. I wish that there were more moms out there with studly sons looking to hand them out as parting gifts to us lonely housewives needing a good (as yet unbroken) boy toy.
LOL
Just kidding!
*::tears in eyes::*
It really was sweet of Narcissa to look out for the well-being and future happiness of her baby boy, Draco. Hermione was a sweetheart to hug Narcissa and reassure her that Draco would never be alone, almost implying that she'll always be there for him.

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Well done--keep up the good work!

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F.Y.I.--error found needing correction:

'He was holding a baby and was looking [You forgot to insert the word "at".] up the stars.'

RE: chapter twenty-five

I'm glad that it was Draco that came across Hermione and that she talked with him about deserving to receive love and attention--a very tender and necessary moment (to be able to find and accept the love that is in front of your face and handed to you on a silver platter).

WOAH--I love how passionate of a kiss they (Hermione and Draco) shared in the library, and then Hermione bringing his face down to hers for more--VERY yummy and sexy!

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Well done--keep up the good work!

RE: chapter twenty-six

Damn Ginny and her ill timed message for Hermione.
'ARGH! Can't you see I'm trying to get myself some here!'
LOL
At least both Hermione and Draco were equally turned on by their snog session.
;~D

I love how right after Ginny left Hermione went right back at Draco, even going so far as to feel him up... only to have Harry bleeding Potter interrupt them next. ARGH!
I love this bit.
'Hermione was so turned on that she could barely think straight ...';
not to mention that Draco was so turned on that he was sporting an erection so hard he could singlehandedly knock down a forest, and was also having difficulties speaking '... his voice still deep and a bit forced'.
;~D

I love how Hermione asked Draco if they would be continuing their "conversation" later, whereupon (one word or two?) his reply was, '

RE: chapter twenty-seven

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RE: chapter twenty-eight

I love how Hermione had sexy thoughts of Draco having been in the shower due to his still having wet hair--naughty girl!
;D

Mmm, I love how when she came back into the bedroom, from her shower...
'She barely got to look for Draco before she felt his body pressed against her back. He pulled her hair away from her shoulder and bent his head down to kiss her neck lightly. He then licked and sucked on her earlobe.'
YUMMY, very sexy indeed--lucky girl!
;~D

Mmm, a very lucky girl indeed to have such a young buck at her beck and call that has the looks, the moves, and the right lines too...
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RE: chapter one

OMG, OMG, OMG--I've forgotten how chilling, scary, horrific this first chapter was.

Very well written--keep up the good work!

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

1) 'One infected stepped out onto the road and looked like a dear ["dear" should be "deer"] caught in their head lights ["head lights" should be "headlights"].

2) 'At least one hundred infected stood blocking to ["to" should be "the"] road.

3) 'They seemed to be just standing [You ought to insert a comma (,) here.] but then they looked at the car.'

RE: chapter two

Bummer about Hermione's parents; at least some of her friends made it to the Ministry alive.

It is good to see that Draco is one of the good guys in that he is trusted enough to have one of the D.A. galleons.

Well done--keep up the good work--chapter three, here I come!
:D

RE: chapter three

I'm glad that Hermione talked Draco into hanging around (to await the potential arrival of friends), otherwise he wouldn't have the knowledge of his mother's safety (or rather, it could have been delayed).

I'm glad that they are still sticking together and not dropping contact because they are no longer at the Ministry.

Well done--keep up the good work!

RE: chapter four

WOW--I like how organized, and well thought out the Ministry officials are during the debriefing at the sanctuary.

Draco and Luna are so sweet to try to comfort Hermione due to her depression/despair.

Well done--keep up the good work!

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F.Y.I.--errors found needing correction:

1) 'The ["The" should be "They"] will have joined us by dawn.'

2) 'Bunks will be set up all over the homestead and at the moment, it ["it" I believe ought to be "it's"] about seven to eight people to a room.'

RE: chapter five

I'm glad that Hermione and Draco had the talk over tea. They cleared the air, got over past grudges, and started the process of becoming friends or more.
:D

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Well done--keep up the good work!