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March 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
good story
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November 8, 2008 at 12:00 AM
love this story!!!!!!!!!!! can't wait to read more of it!!!!!!!!!!!!
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November 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story seems a little rushed like you are desperate to finish it. Perhaps slow things down a little, show Harry's reaction. After being under Dumbledore's thumb and being raised to hate Voldemort would be really trust them so easily? If he got a letter from an anonymous person would he really write back straight away? Would be react so welcomingly to the idea that his parents aren't really his parents? harry seems like a 2D character in this story, theres no emotion to him at all.
never the less I am interested to see where you're going with this. Please email me when you update. gypsy_willow90@hotmail.com
never the less I am interested to see where you're going with this. Please email me when you update. gypsy_willow90@hotmail.com
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November 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think your story has an absolutely DELICIOUS premise.
That being said, I think you need a beta.
I am more than willing to offer my services. =^_^=
If you'd like, drop me a line at ShyGirlAtTimes@aim.com
Slash is love!
XxX
The Defiant One =]=]
That being said, I think you need a beta.
I am more than willing to offer my services. =^_^=
If you'd like, drop me a line at ShyGirlAtTimes@aim.com
Slash is love!
XxX
The Defiant One =]=]