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for Child of New Beginnings

by triz

schedule December 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Now that's how you end a story! I absolutely loved this story! It had everything. tears, laughter, suspence, happiness, sadness, everything! You really are a wonderful writer!

Tiffany
person LilCas
schedule December 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It was good i like it! you scared me there with that chap but I'm Happy thanks!
person erika
schedule December 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
you are very very mean ha ha

i stumbled across this and love it i just wish there was more to read!!!
schedule December 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I read this on another website and just stumbled on it again here and thought I would leave a little review. This has become obe of my favorite stories. It flows well and for the most part you or your betta have caught 99% of grammatical errors. I actually got a lttle teary eyed on this page. You are quite a gifted writer and I look forward to reading more of your stories.
person LilCas
schedule December 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
No No NO NO NO NO NO No No don't kill him please don't do it please i beg of you don't do it!!!!!
schedule December 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Oh my god!! You left me dying to know what is going to happen. Please write again soon. I love this story.
person LilCas
schedule December 23, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I pray that it is a dream and that the next chp either herm are snape will wake up please i beg of you don't kill of snape i beg of you to twist are mind and make it be somthing else.
person Anon
schedule December 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
umm can i ask, is there a chapter missing. i just feel lke i have missed something

Foofie
schedule December 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
OMG!!!!!!!!!!!!

How could you just leave it like that! OOOOHHHHH! I can't wait to find out what happenss next! Please update again and soon!

Tiffany
schedule December 21, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i'm immensely enjoying the story but the end of this chapter really irked me. 2 things: severus did two things that lucius did pretty much to a T: saying he hated seeing woman being vulnerable/crying then promising to protect sebastian... sebastian and her hermione. just like that. i think you have lucius' and severus' personalities blending together too much. ever if they both would act like that in your fic i think some definite phrase changes need to be made because if they were real people i would be so freaked out with how much alike they think.

lastly, i found it a little amusing that both sebastian and hermione cry in someone else's arms then fall asleep in their arms and have to be put to bed. HAHA so he gets his nose and ability to cry himself to sleep from his mother. =D