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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
It's actually a pretty good story. I had my reservations at the grammar, spelling etc, but I really do like this. A few things I've noticed - it's Aunt Petunia who's Harry's aunt, and it's a horcrux. If you want to get a beta, try searching Perfect Imagination, a beta reader site where you can find one to help you. And, even without a beta, I'm sure you can proofread your own work. Surely you know some basic rules - Every new sentence starts with a capital letter, and 'I', when speaking about yourself, is always a capital, which I've noticed you've missed quite a few times. Readers will appreciate the effort of checking through your own chapters
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi,
I really Like your Fic and If I upset You in my last review, I apologize.
It wasn't Meant as Criticism but to help you. You have a very good story line and sometimes spelling mistakes cause people to stop reading. In chapter five you misspelled the word much, you typed mush. Which was a tad confusing
and takes away a little enjoyment of reading your fic. In the chapter nine, you misspelled Horcrux. That is why you need a beta who will catch the spelling mistakes before you update your story online.
There are two ways to get a beta, either you need to check the Forum for the Beta list, or someone can offer to help you.
If you are still having problems finding a beta but the next chapter, email me and I will see if one of my friends can assist you. I would offer my services but I am still waiting to see if one of the fics that I usually beta has been abandoned or not.
I can't wait to see what happens when the threesome actually bond.
If you need it, my email address is Slytherdor7@googlemail.com.
Until the next chapter,
Happy Writing,
Slyth
I really Like your Fic and If I upset You in my last review, I apologize.
It wasn't Meant as Criticism but to help you. You have a very good story line and sometimes spelling mistakes cause people to stop reading. In chapter five you misspelled the word much, you typed mush. Which was a tad confusing
and takes away a little enjoyment of reading your fic. In the chapter nine, you misspelled Horcrux. That is why you need a beta who will catch the spelling mistakes before you update your story online.
There are two ways to get a beta, either you need to check the Forum for the Beta list, or someone can offer to help you.
If you are still having problems finding a beta but the next chapter, email me and I will see if one of my friends can assist you. I would offer my services but I am still waiting to see if one of the fics that I usually beta has been abandoned or not.
I can't wait to see what happens when the threesome actually bond.
If you need it, my email address is Slytherdor7@googlemail.com.
Until the next chapter,
Happy Writing,
Slyth
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like this story but an a little confuced what happened to Fawkes
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
update soon! i love this so much.
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
omfg chapppy 7 was sooooo sexy!!! awesomeness!!!!
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Noooooooooooooooooooooo!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! evil cliffy....*grumbles* awesome story!! plz UPDATE as soon as possible.
oh and if possible i was wondering if u send ppl emails on ur updates. if u do plz Email me at Dbabe16@aol.com or u could just email to chat
aesome fic oce more ^^ XD
oh and if possible i was wondering if u send ppl emails on ur updates. if u do plz Email me at Dbabe16@aol.com or u could just email to chat
aesome fic oce more ^^ XD
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November 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ahh i just found this story and IT IS AWESOME...Why'd you stop tho :(
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November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
MORREEE! *drool* the whole story is so hot especially the lemon. I love this! update soon. im hooked
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November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is a great story, I can't wait till the next chapter. I love the threesome together, and poor Harry we love his hard times because there are usually snuggles after :)
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November 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I think this will be a great story, I love the OC and how all three gan comfort feom each other.I look foward to the next chapter and all snuggling I can get. Will the prince find Harry and Draco together and will the uards become friends with the two mates?