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July 3, 2016 at 12:00 AM
i love it !!
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December 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've been re-reading your stories and I just realised I never reviewed this one! Shame on me haha
I can't believe this was your first story, it's so good! Just goes to show how talented you are!
Nice work =)
I can't believe this was your first story, it's so good! Just goes to show how talented you are!
Nice work =)
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October 30, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was great. I love! the ending.
'hi by the way' lol. That's so awesome.
You did a great job.
'hi by the way' lol. That's so awesome.
You did a great job.
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October 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
"her calling her"-->>"his calling out her" (or "him calling out her"--not sure if that's grammatically okay, but everyone says it that way.)
blonde-->>blond--it's gender sensitive
Smashing job. I like that they haven't be harboring tendres for each other over the years. Cute last line. I also like their outfits. Nice, smoking passion came through clearly.
blonde-->>blond--it's gender sensitive
Smashing job. I like that they haven't be harboring tendres for each other over the years. Cute last line. I also like their outfits. Nice, smoking passion came through clearly.
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October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very good! thorougly enjoyed it, and by reviwing i realised i hit the K key instead of the L key on my name haha. oh well.
good first fic!
good first fic!
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October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
damn, damn, damn, it sucks to be single and read something like this,,i so want..talk about my faintisy coming to life...damn that was so hot..great story!!!!!!!
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October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Nice! Hot, steamy, straight to the point! Good job!
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October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
LMAO - the "Oh fuck it", kind of said it all, didn't it? Loved that line. Nice build up and I like how we saw each of their perspectives to the lead up of their hot little shag. There's a couple of mistakes there with grammar and punctuation but hey, we've all been there, especially me. LOL Nicely done for your first attempt. :)
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October 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
:D I love it, I love it! So intense! And I love Draco's quips - "oh fuck it", "hi, by the way" - such a fun read!
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October 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awesome one-shot!!!!!! You did a great job I hope to read more from you in the future. Congrats on your first fic!