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Didn't you get my beta work where I said that this is wrong:

Hermione turned her head towards the familiar voice of her mother and quickly stood from the cot she was lying on, a momentary look of surprised joy spreading over her face, only to be quickly replaced by a look of sullen trepidation. She suddenly crossed her arms over her chest, put her head down, and slowly backed up until she was hiding behind Remus. Remus watched her with concern; her parents, confusion; Albus, a heavy heart; Severus, disgust, his eyes rolling.

Because Remus and Hermione were in the recliner chair, remamber!

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Love Sonia :)

Oh baby, that felt so real for me. All the emotions. Albus fucken Dumbledore trying to sugar coat everything so that he comes out smelling of roses. Damn I hate that wizard.

I'm just not to sure whether Hermione would have run to her parents and embraced them, but hey, everyone takes stress differently.

I was wondering about this story the other day (and today before you emailed me to let me know that you put this ch up) and thought you must be busy with RL and all. Don't worry as I shall continue to follow you no matter how long it takes you to write this story. People just don't understand how much of your soul goes into writing a story like this, but believe you me I understand.

Anyway just wanted to let you know that you are doing a great job, and I wish you all the best on the toughest writing that is yet to come. I hope you are able to pull it off as it shall be interesting to say the least where you take it from here.

Love Sonia :)

Okay, so Lupin wants to stay. I like that. And appreciating how Dumbledore is letting him be as protective over her as he needs to be. Is that part of his healing, too? All sorts of therapy he'll need from this, too, right? He was also raped and abused.

I actually had a lot to say after first reading it before the weekend, but now have to reread to remember what it all was. Just wanted to fast say something to spur you on to write the next chapter faster. LOL

And BTW thanks for that link to that excellent and on-the-mark short story on ashwinder.

ARGH! This is my second attempt to submit a review for this chapter. The first one got eaten by the site due to its going through its maintenance cycle. UGH!

RE: chapter thirty-one

Thank the gods that Albus and Severus have found a way to visit with Hermione and the babies, and eventual way to rescue them.

Mmmm, I love Hermione and Severus-Remus together. They (Hermione and Severus) have always been one of my favorite pairings. I also like Severus/Hermione/Remus relationships too--a very yummy combo! Anyways, getting back to the story, they were very sweet together and sexy too. I love his tender feelings towards her afterwards--sounds hopeful to me. I would love to read more of them together; more details wouldn't hurt either. Please?!
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FREAKING Kreacher! If it hadn't've been for his threatening the babies, Hermione would never have had that particular night terror, and poor baby Adara may still be alive.

*::tears in eyes, and still feeling choked up::*
Poor Hermione is going to be devasted when she finds that one of her babies has died. Hopefully Severus and Remus will be able to help her though the grieving process.

Too bad it took the death of one of the babies to make it so they (Hermione and the babies) could be rescued.

Very well done--keep up the good work!

Some great things in this chapter:

1. Oh, Sirius. He is this controversial-and-unable-to-think person again. When I was reading about Dumbledore bringing Adara to him, I jumped between these "good guy" and "bad guy" points of view. At first he blames Hermione, and this is bad. Then he realises she's not guilty, and this is good. Then he blames himself, but... He doesn't reach the most logical conclusion - that he shouldn't have started abusing Hermione (and there wouldn't be any nightmares at all in this case). He blames himself for not tying her to bed!!! I couldn't possibly think of such a thing - I guessed it would be just plain "good" or "bad" outcome! Yay Sirius, your lack of logic is back. I can't believe he doesn't even blame Bella for being the most likely cause of nightmares.

2. The result of Kreacher's interaction with Remus. Before now, everything looked like he had developed only a sexual attraction to Hermione. But when he started demanding to see her without actually listening to reason - "she is mine"... oh. He sounds just like Sirius. This was unexpected. I know he is great, and sweet, and understanding, but now I actually feel sad for Hermione, erm, interacting with him. Yup, she needs more sane people in her life, but they cannot be told everything to completely understand her.

3. Of course the rescue cannot solve all problems, but I suppose we readers thought something like "Oh, just let her be rescued and everything will somehow work out!" It seems like they have new problems within the Order - starting with the abovementioned Remus problem now that everything is out. I wonder if Kreacher expected it to happen in such case.

4. Dumbledore. I really like the fact that he is a "good" Dumbledore and not the manipulative-and-thinking-about-greater-good-only Dumbledore. Well, at least on the surface. It just makes me feel somewhat safe and hopeful while reading the story when somebody there behaves just as I suppose I would. There are more sane people, of course, but, for example, Snape... well, let's just say he's not a nice man. It will be great if Hermione stays with him (I absolutely love this pairing, by the way), but still...

Ok it took me 3 days to read this chapter and it was excellent. You handled everything VERY well. You reached out and touched my heart.

I've finally caught up with your story. I am really hoping that Hermione will realize that she shouldn't go with Sirius. You have done a very good job of showing her symptoms of Stockholm syndrome, but I still hope that she is able to see all the harm that he has done to her.

I'm so glad you updated. I started reading this story just expecting some smut, but it is so much more. It has some really upsetting chapters and ideas. It is well-written and well-documented. I did not read the reviews, but did read your replies, and I deduced from them that several people have commented on the topic of having an orgasm while being raped. You gave a good explanation.
I don't know if this has already been mentioned, but I can't understand how Kreacher could have believed he is punishing himself by having sex with Hermione. I mean, I can tell myself I must punish myself by eating some choclate, but I would know that was not really a punishment. (This is a comment on something a few chapters ago, but I only started reading a few days ago.)
I'm curious to how the story will develop. I hope Remus will get his feelings for Nymphadora back and Hermione will end up with Severus and tell Sirius to go fuck himself. Perhaps she could drop some of her worst memories into a pensieve and Sirius be forced to watch them? Maybe then he would stop acting so selvish. I wonder if Draco will turn up again in the story, I would like that. Good luck writing.

SIDS was a great idea, seeing that Hermione is in so much distress anyway and she doesn't deserve the added knowledge of the real reason why Adara is dead. It would be a very good idea to modify Sirius' memory, too, no matter what his wishes are.

BUT: How are they going to explain her why she isn't allowed to sleep in the same room as her child? The statistics say that children who sleep in the same bed with the parents are more likely to dye on SIDS. And the children who sleep on their tummy, which sleep in too warm clothes, on a too soft mattress, with a pillow and such. So, it means, some of the SIDS-babies were probably smothered in their sleep. I knew a baby who died on SIDS and I know someone who could save his kid with a lot of luck. They monitored the child until it was two years old in the sleep. So, using a 'monitoring charm' with a loud alarm and a kind of a 'shocker' 'just in case' might be very helpful, even if it was a pretty lie. They could fix the charm so it would wake even a deaf person...

PS: After the shock of the dead baby I knew, I was scared to death every time my son slept longer than 3 hours t time... And I always let my babies sleep 45