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by bubblybabs

person Anon
schedule July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Wow excellent chapter! Bill put up a good fight!
person Elphaba
schedule July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter! I am very impressed with all the research you put into this!
person WesleyY7
schedule July 13, 2009 at 12:00 AM
*So I've been sitting her trying to figure out the use of the chapter title and it's hidden meaning in the story. I'm so used to your mysteries, I miss when something isn't a mystery at all. And then there was one...curse left. Yeah, I'm dumb.

*"How do I handle this new situation to my advantage?" Ah, manipulative Dumbledore. I know he has the best intentions, but it's so frustrating watching how he treats everyone like pawns in a great game of chess. (That's true for the books, not just this story.)

*Umbridge! Can't believe I forgot about her. It's May and Dumbledore is still there, yet Harry is still being mistreated. Can we assume that the DA has not been formed because Hermione wasn't there?

*Oh, little Persimmione. (I was actually reading a book where the color persimmon was used, so thatnks for the education!) Poor little baby. If Bill sees her, I'm wondering if the red hair will make you suspicious.

*And poor Bill. Good grief, that man is feeling so guilty and now he has to keep working with Hermione. I really hope no one else finds out what happens. (I know I didn't review Chapter 34 because the entire review would have been poor Bill!)

*So, all this talk about tears and breast milk made me go back and reread the Draco chapter. (Shut-up, I love my Draco!) I remember then that she cried a lot at the beginning and Bella had Draco drink breast milk before he did anything else with Hermione. I noticed you went back and edit some clues in their for us with the tear-tingling power. Aren't you the sneaky one! That's why Draco was so kind and intent on pleasuring Hermione; he felt the protective of her. I'm happy though Draco was kind to her before the touching the tears so he's not all bad.

*And in that same chapter Bella drinks the breast milk too. I'm guessing that she's not the one to give Hermione the potion because she seems to be the last person who would want anyone to feel protective towards Hermione. Draco metioned that not all Death Eaters are into rape and only do it to keep suspicion off themselves. Maybe one of those kinder Death Eaters did it so people wouldn't hurt Hermione so badly. Well duh, I guess it would have to be them because if it's not Remus or Sirius that only leaves Kreacher and the DEs. And Snape.

*I'm just waiting for Sirius to snap. I keep thinking something is going to happen at the house and people are going to find out. Molly is especially worried. And I hope Kreacher doesn't escape either. There's just too much suspense! You need to quit your job and write full time for us. I'll donate cookies to help supplement your income. ;)
person Christina H.
schedule July 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hi!
I just finished reading all the chapters you have up so far. Its not done yet is it?

Well, first of all i wanted to say you are an amazing writer, the story is written really well. Also your story made me really understand sirius's character in the books. You described his inner conflicts really well and i can see how he could have been driven to do this. My only problem is, I wish there were more of harry and the gang. Like going to them at ogwarts sometimes, seeing what their doing and what they say about hermione and stuff. cant wait to read the rest, i hope theres not too many more chapters, it has taken me FOREVER to read.
person Kessai
schedule July 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
AHHHHHHHHHHHH! It just ends! Need the rest of the story! Lol.
schedule July 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Dumbly Dore is losing it. Firstly, he should have used some kind of truth serum on kreacher, seeing his reluctance to tell them anything. He certainly should have realized there was more to this. Secondly, letting Bill come alone, or any male for that matter.
Another great chapter.
Update soon please.
person apkblack
schedule June 21, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Looking forward to the update, since there's surely going to be damage control needed for Dumbledore's damage control, which is sure to cause uncontrollable damage ...
schedule June 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh. Dumbledore begins to think about "greater good". It's quite unnerving. But the situation is desperate... I don't know what would I do if I were anyone of them.
It's sooooooooooo good to know the reason behind Hermione's thoughts about her father... It makes me somewhat relieved. Well, lots of unusual&unpleasant things have happened since the beginning, but the "possibility" of this one was really scary. Good to know it was because of the curse and not Hermione's, uh, lack of sanity :D
person WesleyY7
schedule June 10, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hope there's not some sort of law that prevents a consultant from posting a review because I'm doing it anyway! I don't really get a chance to tell you my favorite parts when we talk, so I'll stick those comments here. :)

*Okay, mrsfloyd's "Is Bella sad?" question made me giggle because now I keep picturing Bella wandering around her house morosely, lying in bed missing Hermione, half-heartedly having sex with Rodulphus. Hee hee.

*Lots of information in thish chapter! Upon rereading it, it felt like an episode of "Law & Order". You've got Bill with all his forensic and scientific explanations. And then Albus and Snape (Good cop, bad cop) go in for the Kreacher interrogation.

*"I don't mean to toot my own horn, but I know I'm not unattractive." Have I mentioned how happy I am that Bill has joined our tale? I usually fangirl Charlie the most, but I adore your Bill. Not only is he a wealthy of information, but he's hot too! :)

*Oh, those poor Weasleys! Poor Bill trying to piece everything together. He's going to flip when/if he ever finds out what really happened.

*You know, Albus is still trying to control and manipulate things and I'm worried it's going to blow up in his face. Don't get me wrong, Kreacher was totally owned by Dumbles, but Albus is always way too overconfident. Overconfident in the Mace Windu/Yoda/Jedi Council "No worries, we've got everything covered." type of way.

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schedule June 5, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Dumbydore is sounding pretty manipulative himself here. Even considering giving her back to Sirius is distubing.

Kreacher is still hiding much, isn't he? They need to use the truth serum or whatever on him and try to get the full story before making decisions.

Meantime, is Bella sad? Does she miss her entertainment or is she happy she's caused problems?

Thanks, update soon, please.