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by bubblybabs

person PetMaggie
schedule April 7, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Pleased as punch you've updated! When I saw the updated I decided to reread the entire thing from the beginning. I've forgotten what a ride it was. A lot of the scenes I thought were uber-hot have become a bit creepy now that I know what was in story. Not to say I still don't enjoy it, but the threat hanging above Hermione's head and Adara's fate makes this a tragedy.

I have to agree with some previous reviewers and hope that Sirius and Remus don't end up with Hermione at the end. I have a feeling Sirius, and Kreacher as well, will end up getting their just desserts, but Remus as kind as he still unnerves me. Someone needs to tell him to step off and get Hermione a female protector. And I hope she doesn't end up with Snape either. Him finding humor in what's happening makes me want him away from Hermione too. If she does have to end up with someone, how about Ron whom she loves and who loves her? Or hell, even Bill! I didn't have any feelings for the character before, but have fallen in love with him in this story. He's smart, takes everything in, and is so tender with Persmione.

Questions: Why are they still allowing Sirius to be around people? Will Hermione go back to school and do some learning? She's the brightest witch of her age after all. How many more chapters are left? And, you know someone has to ask, will there be anymore smut?
person justlookingforhg
schedule April 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I've been reading your tale for a while but have not reviewed before--I think. Anyway, I just wanted to say that I hope neither Remus nor Sirius end up anywhere near Hermione by the time you are finished. You probably have other plans tho. I find (and have found since first being involved) that Remus' behavior--curse induced or not--is extremely creepy. I know that is probably not how you wanted it it to be seen since you seem to be sympathetic toward Remus as a character--and perhaps Sirius as well. I find their behavior disturbing even if they are 'victims' as you call them. It's just creepy. It's disturbing that Hermione would feel safe with Remus and defend Sirius, but considering the treatment she went thru, it is understandable. I'm not a big Hermione/Snape fan either; but in this story, Snape would be a better protector and, for some reason, a lot less distressing. Anyway, I will be completely disappointed (and ill!) if Sirius gets Hermione back by the end of the story.

That all being said, is just my opinion so treat it as you will. I did want to say--plot-line aside-- that you write rather well. Many of the stories on this site are just excuses to write smutty crap that use little originality (structure, grammar and punctuation!) and have unfocused direction. You have been thorough in your research, and you have supported your story premise in your prose. Your characters have acted in believable ways and stayed in character as most understand them to be. I enjoy reading your story becuz it is well written which is rare to read on some fan sites.

I am glad to see you post after so long as I thought you might not finish. (Many people swear they won't abandon their story, but it happens anyway) Even tho I'm a bit wary about what you have in store for the conclusion of your story, I am curious to see how it ends. I hope I won't have to wait too long. I look forward to it.
schedule April 6, 2011 at 12:00 AM
You are right, this is really hard to read. I don't understand why Severus does not tell them that Kreacher threatened harm to the babies the night before and most likely triggered that particular nightmare. Here's hoping that she does not choose to go back to Sirius. p
person RavenJedi
schedule February 21, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Ive really enjoyed this story. Its been hot and exciting and disturbing and tragic. You havent updated in a while so Im assuming you have abandoned this story. That sucks. Your a very descriptive writer who puts alot of emotion into what your characters are goign through. You dont hold back.

Im sure you have your reasons and I know harry potter fanfiction does not trump real life but I really love this story. Ive seen authors who know they wont finish there stories give summaries on how the stories will end. Is there any chance you would do that. I hate that I wont be able to read chapters but I want to know that Hermione and her daughter will be safe and free. If you are planning let your fans know what we can do to cheer you on. You do have a lot of fans even if we dont review like we should. Im going to be pathetic and beg. Please update!
person Nicole
schedule November 24, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Please tell me this is continuing? Now thwat we are finally ppast everything else i find the twists and turns fascinating.
person WesleyY7
schedule October 16, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Aw, I was hoping for the 200th review, but it looks like I'll have to settle for the 199th. Today is October 16th, which means you posted chapter 1 of Cherries two years ago today! Even though it's not complete as of yet, thanks for 41 chapters of a roller coaster of a story! :) *blows on of those annoying party horns that squeak and unroll/roll back*
person PetMaggie
schedule October 11, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I'm on vacation and just read this entire thing over the past few days. Can a story be disturbing and hot? Can it titillate and arouse, yet make you feel guilty for enjoying it? The range of emotions I have experienced as I have read this is amazing. Original and dark. Porny and emotional. Your plot and grasp of the characters are fantastic and your research is fascinating. I hope your future chapters will continue to turn me on one minute while slapping me across the face the next. I'm going cliche here...please update soon.
person willie0503
schedule September 14, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Hi, I've never reviewed a story before, but here goes. This story is VERY good so far. You have been able to keep my intrest over these 40 chapters, which is sayin a lot conidering I am adhd lol. The plot is wonderfully unpredictable at times and definitely emotionally engaging. I know I personally want to kill kreacher and sirius, yes I know he was influenced but still, and punch remus for being obnoxious as to what's going on with himself. You are an excellent writer and i can't wait to see how this story ends.
person Elphaba
schedule August 9, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I was just wondering what was happening with this story. Thanks for the update! It was excellent and long. looking forward to the next one.
schedule August 7, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I glad that you have updated his story. Though I have not reviewed ths story before, I feel that I have good reason. I have started and stopped reading several times, the subject and the way it is presented is so intence that it is hard to express my feeling on this story. It is gut renching, I have never read anything this descusting and so well put together at the same time. My frst and formost thought is that you kill all of them very slowly, starting with Kreacher and Serius, but all of them. There are no innosent parties invalved, except Hermione of course. If this wasn't fiction the poor girl would have to be locked up and sedated for the rest of her life. You are a very amazing writer, you write the horrible seens with the most care and understanding that I have ever seen. I making the reader feel emothion beyond the norn is your intent, then you are one of the best I have ever seen. Full Marks!!!!!!!!!