rate_review Reviews

I have been reading this story for about two weeks now...WOW!!!!!!

I am a major D/s slut and Hermoine (even though she is doing better) is an excellent submissive. I LOVE that she misses the ropes; that was priceless.

Plots everywhere, you never know what will happen next. Will Sirius get to Hermoine? Will Severus and Bill try to get some "private" time with Hermoine? Was her father affected?

I can't wait to see what happens next!?!?!?!?! I await your next chapter with bated breath.

I said I was curious about the ending?... Well... now, I'm not.

It has some good sex-scenes (but others are dead boring), so you could cut it, and make some decent one-chapter PWP fics...

But the 'plot'?... is totally incoherent, non-logical, and often ridiculous... basically all the wizard population is retarded, and while all people has a IQ of 20 Kreacher has 70 so he is the king!!!... He will be totally invincible... until the moment you chose to take him down, of course. Not very original. Usually is Super-Powerful-Dark-Lord Voldemort, in this fic is Super-Powerful-Dark-Lord Kreacher... but it's the same thing.

0-10? I give it a 3.

Hi! Just wanted to thank you for writing a realistic fic (on account of a woman losing her virginity, I mean). I also read you AN on chapter three and it was eye-opening to tell the truth. I could actually relate myself to many of the things you wrote and thus was encouraged to research the subject further.

I, while definitely not a virgin for many years, am still highly inexperienced in love making. Particularly the part of penetration that should feel nice. Even if I think that I'm aroused enough, I have never felt any positive feelings from it and cannot describe it being better than "tolerable". Even though I understand that erotic fiction is mostly inaccurate, I have at times doubted myself and thought that there was something wrong with me. None of my friends could understand my problem either. However, now I have hope that things could get better... =)

About your fic itself: I like the overall dark feel of it. Both Sirius and Hermione being manipulated expertly by an sadistic house elf is actually deeply arousing thought :3

Thanks for your fic so far. Now I'm going to read chapter 4 -->

correct... but totally unreal... Snape and Dumbledore are terrific Legitimens?, they would see it in Sirius, and Snape could use veritaserum on him... and Mad-eye would see him with Hermione with his magic eye at the first chance... in short, it seems it's the typical fic, the main character always do whatever he wants, and all the rest of the characters are totally powerless against him.

This is getting out of control... Remus knows Sirius is torturing and raping Hermione and go to talk to him? alone? without telling anyone?...

bufff... this is getting boring... 42 chapters!... the sex was good, but after the kidnapping.. has no interest, is only a list of 'deviations'. And the plot, the thing what would make this interesting... is so illogical! it make the fic boring... no matter what's happening, nothing has sense, so anything can occur without make any coherence with what has happened before...

It's a shame... so realistic in some ways, and so unrealistic in the most important ones...

Do you really think a crisis like this can go unresolved for more of a day or two?... Molly would let Ginny stay? or Harry? The order would still using a house who is not safe?... do you really think Ron and Harry (with the help of Dobby and/or Mad-Eye) couldn't find her? etc, etc, etc...

Day 1: Hermione disappears.
Day 2: The headquarters are dissasembled from botton to top.
ALL PEOPLE is searched with legetimency and veritaserum... and sniffed by Remus and Snape!?
Hermione is found, Kreached killed, and Sirius probably killed too (or send back to azkaban)
End of story.

If by some strange thing, they couldn't find Hermione, the next obvious step is to destroy the headquarters stone by stone... until they would find her.

It's totally ridiculous to think they would do nothing about it for days, weeks... years?... totally ridiculous.

I'm a little curious about how can this mess end... but I will briefly go over the remaining chapters.

so much imperius!... but Sirius can't 'imperiuse' Kreacher?... ridiculous!

Hot, hot, hot then dark, dark, dark.
Wicked and fantabulous.
Agree with aboves. Keep H away from R S and S. Weasleys are a safer choice
Am sick for wanting more sex too. Where's Draco?
Don't make this too sad
More please.

not bad... at this point I hope Hermione, in the end, will get her revenge over this two sick idiots.

and men aren't idiots... (well, maybe teenagers are) of course knows how women 'works'... I saw some porn begin doing, and women are acting, of course, but although they don't orgasm, they enjoy it, especially when they know their partners... at least some of them do, maybe it's not the same for all.

I just wanted to say how much I've enjoyed reading your story, I started reading it yesterday morning and couldn't stop until I reached the last one.

I bawled my eyes out at Adara's funeral (my mascara was streaked down my face) I have been wondering if Hermione's different scent is to do with the fact she's a muggleborn or is there something else lingering in her DNA.

I think Remus has been sweet and understanding throughout, however I can't help feeling like Severus is going to play a bigger role with Hermione (not just with schooling).

I really dislike Sirius in this story because the man has behaved like a total arse, at the beginning he was kinda sweet but the fact he raped Hermione and then punished her for being withdrawn and making everyone suspicious of him just completely made him unforgiveable in my eyes. (in an ideal scenario I'd love to see Hermione kick his arse or Harry ) I understand that Kreacher encouraged him to indulge in his baser desires
but that doesn't excuse him in my book.

I look forward to your next chapter with anticipation.

(The only time I was really squicked out was when Hermione was gang banged by all the house elves and the dogs)

P.S. I can now no longer look at house elves in the same light ;D