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Ok What I meant ;) There has to be a way of getting out of Kreacher holding all the cards. Wow long chapter! I love that Hermione isn't so far gone that she is going blind with everything again.

Ok, the dreams... 1st a question, is the creaking scene a dream or did someone actually come in her room? I can actually see that happening since these people are just plain evin an would do that to mess with her.

The night terrors/ dream scene where she is in the dark, can't see anything and is hiding from the green monster, the darkness I think represents her feelings of hopelessnes and abandonment. She doesn't see an escape (I kind of agree with that part, I don't see an escape either, I'm really hoping you have one in mind for her though.) from her current situation and believes everyone is tricking her, which they are.

I think the green monster represents something about herself that she finds scary or ugly, which could be the part of her that likes some of the treatment she recieves. She doesn't like all of it, but she likes enough of it that she is wondering what kind of person that makes her. It also could be the repressed feelings and emotions about her current situation, she talked about them in the beginning of the chapter. Or it could be the baby, dreams are so subjective.

I don't know if the color green means anything in this situation...ok ok, I took a class on this once, sorry for showing off.

Overall, a MUCH better chapter than the last one. I am still anxious to see SS enter the picture. I am kinda hoping that he is more like Mr. Malfoy and is less brutal than she expects him to be. I don't think he could be any worse than those psycho Death Eaters she is already with. But please don't try to prove me wrong on this... ok I take it back. He could be worse.

You said earlier that we were going to see some of these people get their's and get taught a lesson. Is that coming anytime soon? I know Sirius has already gotten slapped down some since he can't really do what he wants to with her, but is Kreacher gonna get his? He is just disgusting! I want his head mounted on the wall, nope that is too good for him. Make him into a potion ingredient for a really nasty potion and kill the death eaters with it.... oh well. Just a thought.

I do believe I called you a tease in my last review. Name still holds since this was posted on a Monday morning and I couldn't read it until I got home. *sigh*

*Comments on comments - "the scat stuff never would have been added if someone hadn't requested it" Damn you, user 1505627! The bathroom stuff is all your fault! "Who else, do you suppose, has he been teaching?" Okay, bad mental image of Kreacher doing is nightly teachings with Dumbledore or Moody. Bad brain, bad! (Is it okay to comment on an author's comments to other reviewers? Hmmm.) I did notice the 't' in my name, but no worries. I was dumb enough to leave out an 'a' years ago, so I'm a Wes instead of a Weasley. Having read a lot of HP fic, I've seen wands used in a variety of ways, especially femmeslash. Although Draco seems to be successful with a vibrating charm in a number of stories too.

*Onto the fic. (I love your long chapters.) Time sure is flying by. It's been a month since Ginny, and now almost two months pass in this chapter. Should I really begin worrying about the baby now?

*I love your writing style. I hope I've said that before. It's unique and interesting. You don't jump back and forth from characters' points of view within the same scene. (Huge pet peeve of mine! I've seen POV changes in the same paragraph!) It's always a nice little treat that you once your POV changes, not only do you continue with whatever's happening, but we get the thoughts and feelings of what's happened before. I liked how you did that the first night Kreacher and Sirius came into her room. I think you did it too when Ron was down in the basement. And here you have Hermione, while worried about Ginny (the "younger" woman by a year!), she flashes back to their time together and we get more detail about something that was only mentioned. We get a great, new sexy scene and Hermione gets to reflect on her conflicting feelings. Hope all that made sense. I just find it neat. I'm sure there's a fancier literary word for it, but there you go. Neat.

*Okay, okay, I know Kreacher is the real villian here. I do. However, despite what the elf is doing, I still continue to be angry with Sirius. Threatening Hermione. Imperiusing the girls *without* prompting from Kreacher. Refusing to teach her to protect her mind because he doesn't want to let her go. (This is surprising since he worries that she isn't there to inspire Harry. A rare time when he chooses his wants over his Godson's needs.)

*Ginny crying and wanting her mum? That is too sad.

*Interesting to see events from OotP woven in here. That's right, Hermione isn't there to get an interview with Rita. Won't that mean most people don't know the true story thus not supporting Harry? The discussion of Occlumency and Legilimency...just a discussion or something more. Hmmmm...I may have some theories, but I have to think about them for a bit. (Of course, it could be nothing and you're thinking that I'm crazy!)

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So many things to take in in this chapter.

Firstly there is the fact that Hermione's baby is Ron's. What? Didn't really see that one coming. Next there is the fact that Ginny was taken, I kind of expected that, but not the point of Ron taking Ginny. I still feel for Hermione, having to be taken daily to Bella's house of horrors can't be good for ones self imagine. I also wonder what will happen when she had the child. If it is indeed Ron's, what will Kreacher do to it?

Wonderful chapter.

Love Sonia :)

So many twists and turns in Chapter 18! I don't even know where to start, you cruel, cruel woman! (We love it, though!)

*The baby is Ron's! When you threw in that "maybe you'll get lucky and sire a brat" all those chatpers ago, this crossed my mind, but then I dismissed it. Poor, poor Hermione. Carrying the baby of the boy she loves (hear that, Sirius!) while be held captive. And a girl. That made me shiver in a really bad way. All I can think of is you going super beyond dark, Hermione never getting out, and the girl being raised as another slave. Sirius continues with the crazy. You're not that old, go find a woman of your own to complete your precious blood line. And stay away from the baby's milk! She'll need more than few days' worth. (Well, he doesn't have to stay all the way away of course.)

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I did not see that coming in Chapter 17! I'm floored that Kreacher rebelled like that! Now my worry level has been raised to orange.

soniab's reivew has me worried as I hope you don't ever see my reviews as flames. When I was concerned with review etiquette earlier, you assured me that you liked to hear what your readers liked and didn't like. I may not like or agree with every point your story takes, but of course I know it's your story and I'm still very much enjoy reading it. Plus, I get the feeling your goal is to make us uncomfortable at times.

The 2nd half of chapter 19, the part that covered Ginny's point of view of were completely unnecessary and redundant. An almost verbatim repeat of what was stated in the beginning of the chapter from Sirius' point of point. Including the fruit thing with Ginny was interesting, but overall this chapter didn't have the same kick for me that some of the others do. Maybe it was the F/F thing, who knows but it wasn't as hot for me. I did like the hints, I think I caught some of them. Especially with the whole incest thing at the end. Clearly Kreacher has been messing with people in their sleep other than just Sirius and Hermione. Is there something else we should be on the lookout for, like a rescue?(hint, hint)And where is SS? Still anxiously waiting for him to enter the picture.

Thanks for restating the length.

oh there has to be away around that!

Keacher is in everyone's mind. I have a feeling I know what will happen with the baby.

RE: Chapter 18