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I don't know if you were referring to this chapter (at the beginning) or the next chapter however, I did not find this chapter difficult to read at all.

I liked the fact that Draco has a heart and that Albus and Severus have come up with a plan to rescue Hermione and her daughters. I really have to wonder if Hermione will stay with Sirius after all is said and done? Hmmm, it will e interesting to find out. Also, I would very much like to see how you handle her psychological healing as I have to go through that in my own story and although I know how I shall approach it, I am always interested in how other writers tackle a the subject.

Am still enjoying the story.

Love Sonia :)

One other comment, about healing. I wonder if Sirius will be given a chance to heal in your story, too. Immature he may be, but he's been subject to mind-control and manipulated to an extreme degree, even to the point of insanity. He needs a healing, too. (Then again, that could just be because he's my soft spot. Well, okay, not in this story he's not, but as a general rule, that is.)

'For a brief moment, he was disgusted with himself when he wondered what his Aunt tasted like before another one of Hermione's moans snapped him back to the task at hand that lay before him.' Isn't this sentence kind of repetitive? Wouldn't either 'the task at hand' or 'what lay before him' work? But enough about sentence structure.

You're right about feeling better about Remus with this chapter.

I came into the story hating Draco and this chapter didn't help on that score.

I feel like the story is really slowing down. I almost fell asleep while reading the Draco section. Not sure if that's because I'm exhausted from pumping water out of my basement for the 3rd day in a row or because of the writing and my dislike of Draco.

Sirius and his attempts to 'keep' Hermoine are sad and really say a lot for Kreacher's mind control sessions.

Keep up the good work and please update soon. Am anxiously awaiting Hermoine's rescue.

Okay. On a personal note --- I forgot to ask on first review.

Why do some stories (and this chapter) come up at double the page width and others come up normal page width? Can anyone tell me how to correct this as I find it very annoying. Sorry for posting a 2nd review to ask but I keep forgetting and can't find any way to change this myself.

While your description of the birth of the first baby is good, I believe that the description of the second baby's birth was inaccurate. Breech biths are extremly more difficult than the normal delivery. I also just wanted to point out that you should never pull on a baby during a breech birth in fear of hurting the baby's nech or tearing the mother.

I have officially renamed Chapter 28 the Aaaaaaaahhhhhhhh! chapter.

*I hate how you sneak little hints in your reviewer comments becasue I want to analyze them and see if I can figure them out!

*Kreacher is an evil little elf, but I find a little humor in the fact that he can't be bothered with Remus if all he's going to do is spend time with Hermione and the babies and not hop into bed.

*I can see how Sirius, crazy as he is, gets jealous of Remus with Hermione. They're getting very comfortable and close with one another. Remus casually leaning down upon arrival and giving her a kiss on the lips is very telling of his growing affection for her.

*So, so happy that Hermione has bonded and accepted both the babies. Those small, quiet moments with the girls are rather sweet. Of course, I'm all the more worried they'll be used as a bargaining chip against Hermione at some point.

*Oh Remus, did you really think Kreacher would wait a whole month before he brought her back to Bella? And we've gone from a sweet scene, to Holy Crap! In all other stories, a leering Draco Malfoy would be a great presend indeed, but here? Aaaaahhhh! (He wasn't too mean to her, was he? He's just a mere lad of 15.)

*What to say about the confession scene? Finally! Sirius beginning to realize how wrong he is was lovely to see. And he starts doubting Kreacher's influence as well. Kreacher's influence is far-reaching and scary if those two can actually stop such an important conversation and consider going back to use Hermione.

*A pause. Then,

man.
WTF
this is the creepiest story i have ever read.
its actually fucking WRONG.
and disturbing
and horrific.
yet i find myself addicted
with hermiones plight,.
please make it end soon!
<3

Excellent chapter! I love S s coming to his senses and that Albus knows. I am worried for Mione since she is with Bella

Finally, he confessed. And what I suspected a time ago, seems to be it: I think the whole thing has been orchestrated by Bella acting as Kreacher 'Master', using Sirius' Infatuation and influencing him, brainwashing him. You did a great job by showing this to be not completely Sirius' fault without exculpating him for his own mistakes.

I can see how he is not able to 'let her go'. I must think about an old calendar picture of a seagull:

"If you love something, let if free. If it comes back, its yours, if it doesn't, it never was."

But of course, his highly damaged mind will stop him from seeing it like that.

OMG! Is it possible there's hope for Sirius yet? He's already so damaged by his own madness and Kreacher's particular form of teaching that I was convinced he was beyond saving, but now I wonder if I'm seeing a dim light of reason and sanity coming on in his mind. I hope so, even though Sirius has never been my favorite character, we all know his time is limited, provided you decide to send him on through the veil, and it's rather sad to think of his going to the afterlife with his soul completely blackend. Dumbledore was great, but can he get Black to see past himself? Draco? I was sort of hoping Lucius could keep Draco out of this. Well, we'll see what the next chapter brings. In the meantime, Die Kreacher, Die! Slowly and in great mental and physical agony.