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Wow, fast update. The premise makes perfect sense now. Thank god you went with a guardianship angle than Marriage Law. Much more original.

There's a sick twisted little piece of me that's delightfully happy that Severus is getting into his cups and frantic with nervous energy. It's not often that we see him entirely off his game.

The POV shift is interesting. And, I think it works in this case.

My only real suggestion is to run your chapters through a down-and-dirty Beta. There were some tense problems and minor grammar/spelling issues. No show stoppers, but another set of eyes reviewing the material will clean it up and make it that much better.

Excellent first fic.

This is a great story. I can't wait to read more.

Excellent beginning so far.

I like it. Please update soon.

And they told me that I could be the queen of cliff hangers. Goodness. I do like this start, and I tend not to read stories that are more than one-off's, as I don't have time to keep up with them, but this caught my eye, and you have not disappointed me. You did a very good job of recreating for the reader what it would be like to experience those first moments of coming to after a coma. A moment of weakness when he references her as Hermione, perhaps? It seemed disjointed from the other references to her, and for her to immediately reference him as Severus...it could be an interesting plot turn or twist point if you choose to utilize it as such. My compliments to this start, and I do hope that you update this one rather quickly. I am most keen to discover if there was a relationship between the two of them before she was hit with the curse, or if this marriage came about because of some law enforced while she was under, or if marrying her was the only way he could take her home so that Mungo's wouldn't give up on her like a lost cause. (Sort of like when Sandra Bullock lies and tells the paramedic's she's that guy's fiancee to get into the ambulance with him in the movie you've borrowed your title from) Kudos.
~CC

Okay, this is a promissing start, I think.

You migth want to clear up how she can be married to Snape when she was in a coma. Since there seems to be no danger from Voldemort anymore, that must be enlighted. It might be some kind of wizarding stuff that you can only leave a patient in the care of the next of kin and that you can get married even if not consenting as long as your guardian agrees...

Continue, I do think it's worth it!

i like it so far, keep it up!

oooh...nice start! I love your Severus already and he still has his robes on!

Can;t wait to see where this goes!

I like it. Please update soon.

Interesting opening! I like it so far, but how are you going to explain Severus' survival? Did Death Eaters get the Grangers, or are they simply still lost in Australia? An accident, perhaps? I take it he had to marry her to prevent the Healers from removing any form of life-support? More, please, whenever you're ready!