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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Bad author! Bad!
Cinderelli you should be crying!
Cinderelli you should be crying!
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 8-
Oh my. There's always His story. Her story. And the truth. Does it absolve his/her guilt in the matter? Nope. But it does go a long way to shed understanding on the matter. Thank you for this. I knew whole big chunks were missing from the story, now it's starting to tie together.
At this point I still don't see reconcilation on the horizon, but I'm eager to keep reading.
Oh my. There's always His story. Her story. And the truth. Does it absolve his/her guilt in the matter? Nope. But it does go a long way to shed understanding on the matter. Thank you for this. I knew whole big chunks were missing from the story, now it's starting to tie together.
At this point I still don't see reconcilation on the horizon, but I'm eager to keep reading.
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 9-
Not surprised she ran. Not really. Not saying that I would, but I understand it, or at least I think I do. The yet unnamed boy was never wanted, she was a social pariah as a lycan killer, and felt more than ever-so-slightly emotionally detached. You stated her only constant friends were Harry and Ginny, well, that disolved. There's no support there. I was almost waiting, anticipating, Kingsley trapping Severus into being the tot's Dad. (Sad about nobody wanting to adopt the child given his parents) But as a plot device it works. Lovely.
Not surprised she ran. Not really. Not saying that I would, but I understand it, or at least I think I do. The yet unnamed boy was never wanted, she was a social pariah as a lycan killer, and felt more than ever-so-slightly emotionally detached. You stated her only constant friends were Harry and Ginny, well, that disolved. There's no support there. I was almost waiting, anticipating, Kingsley trapping Severus into being the tot's Dad. (Sad about nobody wanting to adopt the child given his parents) But as a plot device it works. Lovely.
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Chapter 10-
Filler chapter. Caught us up on Ginny. I don't know if your readers are still spitting mad at this point. Though, nobody is as mad as Severus. He's in serious trouble of stroking out. Naturally I'm curious about the clues left behind, if any, but not holding my breath. Red herring and all. I almost expect you to be evil like that. Not that I don't love it. Curve balls are much appreciated. Anytime a reader knows for certain what's going to happen three chapters ahead something's wrong.
Filler chapter. Caught us up on Ginny. I don't know if your readers are still spitting mad at this point. Though, nobody is as mad as Severus. He's in serious trouble of stroking out. Naturally I'm curious about the clues left behind, if any, but not holding my breath. Red herring and all. I almost expect you to be evil like that. Not that I don't love it. Curve balls are much appreciated. Anytime a reader knows for certain what's going to happen three chapters ahead something's wrong.
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Bloody effing hell woman! What were you thinking? You are not, I repeat NOT supposed to make me like the other woman. I said before I was sorry that she died but you did not have to give me their back story. Not fair. Not fair. I cannot like her, I cannot feel sorry for her!
That night was not Hermione's fault. He should have kept it in his pants, and She should not have acted the immature child and left him the way she did.
Some of us read this instead of doing their work and it is hard to explain to your boss why you are yelling about some blasted woman and why you are crying and asking to have an early lunch when you practically just got to the office.
Okay enough ranting. You woman are cruel and I can only hope that you are not so sadistic that you will let that man take his anger out on Hermione and/or the boy more than he has done. I understand his grief, I do know that it is cathartic to cry and perhaps take out your anger on those you feel caused your loss, but I also know that at times like that some things are said that you later regret and sometimes the other person is unable to get past how you hurt them and things cannot be worked out.
This has been a long review and this is the most that I have reviewed on this site. I think I've only reviewed maybe once or twice before, and only one liners. I know now that I should not read this while at work, I await your next post.
That night was not Hermione's fault. He should have kept it in his pants, and She should not have acted the immature child and left him the way she did.
Some of us read this instead of doing their work and it is hard to explain to your boss why you are yelling about some blasted woman and why you are crying and asking to have an early lunch when you practically just got to the office.
Okay enough ranting. You woman are cruel and I can only hope that you are not so sadistic that you will let that man take his anger out on Hermione and/or the boy more than he has done. I understand his grief, I do know that it is cathartic to cry and perhaps take out your anger on those you feel caused your loss, but I also know that at times like that some things are said that you later regret and sometimes the other person is unable to get past how you hurt them and things cannot be worked out.
This has been a long review and this is the most that I have reviewed on this site. I think I've only reviewed maybe once or twice before, and only one liners. I know now that I should not read this while at work, I await your next post.
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Harsh
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Again, how old is this Malfoy girl? Draco's twin? Older, younger?
Sooner or later he is going to realize that his grief is mis-directed. He's blaming Hermione for HIS actions and HIS choices. He's blaming an innocent baby for those same things. He's blaming Hermione for something he KNOWS Ginny did, even though he KNOWS that Hermione was tricked into it.
The only thing I can see that Hermione made a mistake in doing was lying about her name when she 1) was VERY drunk and ran away from him to a bathroom to puke, 2) he persued her into the bathroom to half force her to have sex (while her pussy was saying yes, the rest of her seemed to be protesting and most definitely not of the ability to make rational decisions). I won't go so far as to call this "rape" but he was rather determined, wasn't he? She was wasted -- way more drunk than he was and HE was the one that persued her. What's more, even through his alcohol hazed brain, I think he was well aware of just how wasted she was -- it was just karma that it came back to being a witch that he randomly fucked instead of some muggle he'd never see again. His bad.
As sad as it is for Severus to lose the one he loved, this guy is a dickhead. Again, he'll lose what little he has left (his son) if he can't even see the forest for the trees. If he is as smart as everyone gives him credit for, then he should get to the bottom of what Draco and Ginny were up to and why. Again, what was their motivation for having Hermione crash the wedding? There seems to be no purpose.
One reviewer thought it was crass for her to offer the adoption to him a weeks post tragedy. How so? She explained that the adoption agency was pushing her to make a decision and she felt he deserved to make the first choice, being the biological father. It would have been cold and crass to mail a letter or send someone in her stead. She also tried to convey her sympathy and she feels guilty for something she didn't cause.
Someone pointed out that this isn't really a SS/HG story. They have a good point, especially, if everyone loses in the end. Other than a one night stand that has repercussions that end in tragedy for everyone involved, including a baby being given up for adoption because NEITHER parents want it, you may just want to categorize this as Severus/Other or General Angst, or even perhaps, Ginny/Draco. I see no SS/HG here.
Sooner or later he is going to realize that his grief is mis-directed. He's blaming Hermione for HIS actions and HIS choices. He's blaming an innocent baby for those same things. He's blaming Hermione for something he KNOWS Ginny did, even though he KNOWS that Hermione was tricked into it.
The only thing I can see that Hermione made a mistake in doing was lying about her name when she 1) was VERY drunk and ran away from him to a bathroom to puke, 2) he persued her into the bathroom to half force her to have sex (while her pussy was saying yes, the rest of her seemed to be protesting and most definitely not of the ability to make rational decisions). I won't go so far as to call this "rape" but he was rather determined, wasn't he? She was wasted -- way more drunk than he was and HE was the one that persued her. What's more, even through his alcohol hazed brain, I think he was well aware of just how wasted she was -- it was just karma that it came back to being a witch that he randomly fucked instead of some muggle he'd never see again. His bad.
As sad as it is for Severus to lose the one he loved, this guy is a dickhead. Again, he'll lose what little he has left (his son) if he can't even see the forest for the trees. If he is as smart as everyone gives him credit for, then he should get to the bottom of what Draco and Ginny were up to and why. Again, what was their motivation for having Hermione crash the wedding? There seems to be no purpose.
One reviewer thought it was crass for her to offer the adoption to him a weeks post tragedy. How so? She explained that the adoption agency was pushing her to make a decision and she felt he deserved to make the first choice, being the biological father. It would have been cold and crass to mail a letter or send someone in her stead. She also tried to convey her sympathy and she feels guilty for something she didn't cause.
Someone pointed out that this isn't really a SS/HG story. They have a good point, especially, if everyone loses in the end. Other than a one night stand that has repercussions that end in tragedy for everyone involved, including a baby being given up for adoption because NEITHER parents want it, you may just want to categorize this as Severus/Other or General Angst, or even perhaps, Ginny/Draco. I see no SS/HG here.
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
YOU are killing me with this. I have not felt so baldly for Severus since I read about the whole Lily fiasco in the original series. This man is followed by loss and unanswered what ifs. I am patiently waiting to find out what Hemione is going to do and, I am all to curious about Dracos role in this whole thing. In response to your comment before the latest chapter: I think all brilliant minds have a little insanity in them. That little bit is what makes them brilliant. Can't wait for more. Well done!!!!!
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Alrighty....lets see if I can make sense of my tangled thoughts here.....
This could be a Jerry Springer episode LMAO...."I got pregnant by my daddy's best friend but he cheated on me and now the other girl is pregnant and she crashed my wedding....."(no offense is meant in that, by the way) You have alot of stories going on here. The NM/SS angle....why was she living with Sev? Of all people to give your childs care over to, why him? Why would LM approve such a match? Was the baby really Sevs? is that why Nalina was so desperate to marry? Then there is Ginny and Draco...their affair, their meddling....then the Baby boy....you seem to have written yourself into a corner with the HG/SS relationship, I am insterested to see how you resolve that.
Good luck and Happy Writing!!
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This could be a Jerry Springer episode LMAO...."I got pregnant by my daddy's best friend but he cheated on me and now the other girl is pregnant and she crashed my wedding....."(no offense is meant in that, by the way) You have alot of stories going on here. The NM/SS angle....why was she living with Sev? Of all people to give your childs care over to, why him? Why would LM approve such a match? Was the baby really Sevs? is that why Nalina was so desperate to marry? Then there is Ginny and Draco...their affair, their meddling....then the Baby boy....you seem to have written yourself into a corner with the HG/SS relationship, I am insterested to see how you resolve that.
Good luck and Happy Writing!!
S_G
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October 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Ok, wierd ending, will he find hermione and make her sign the papers