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Winters,
This is absolutely CC's story -- what's great abou it is that it's making us think and react and feel and theorize and all that good stuff. That's a good thing. I don't know about anybody else, but I am most definitely NOT dissing on CC.

That being said, with it bing CC's creation, she can do whatever she wants, of course. So if she wants to make Nalina into the cliche Mary Sue, it's certainly her perogative. I'm guessing she isn't but then that's just my guesses, nothing more. That being said, even if Nalina was a perfect, flawless Mary Sue, she is dead.

So now Severus is going to have to get to the bottom of what the hell has been going on in the Malfoy household, has to decide what do about his son, has to decide how to deal with Hermione and whether or not he's going to help her with her research and then....go on with life. I think it's sweet that you want to hug Sev, but he's not the only one grieving for the loss of loved ones and he's not the only one effected by tragedy. And lucky him, he doesn't have to cope with post-partem depression throughout his grieving process either.

The ulimate bad guy is pointing to Lucius Malfoy right now and the ultimate scapegoat and loser in the whole damn game, as usual is working out to be Hermione Granger. Everyone else is going to come out smelling like roses probably.

hum maybe my imagination is not that far off it goes something like this:
That the baby Snapes lil Malfoy girlfriend yes alto was prego it wasnt snapes oh no it was daddy's
lol ok so maybe not quite that simple but hey i have a bad dirty mind hehehe
ok well update soon ok course you always do which I totally love you for.
Des

Yeah, that brings it back a little to my squicky Elektra theory, but I agree with you. Instead of being Harry she's been doing on the side, it's actually dear old dad.

Draco and Nalina are half siblings with same mom (Narcissa) and different dads. Nalina's dad is really Severus but he/she didn't know that. Lucius, in a plot of revenge, set them both up with a lust/love spell or potion to get them to fall inlove, even though they are really biological father/daughter. Yes, squicky. Meanwhile, Lucius is boffing Nalina (instead of Harry...or maybe in addition to, lol). Maybe he's polyjuiced as Snape or imperius curse or what have you.
Now that's some serious revenge: "You screwed my wife and she got pregnant with your spawn, so I'm going to make it so you fall inlove with your own daugher, have sex with her and then I'm going to screw her and impregnate her with MY spawn." Yeah, I could see Lucius doing something really sick and twisted like that.

I'm still wondering how old Nalina was, in relation to Draco, et. al.? Not that it matters, because she's dead, but yeah...

Please don't turn this into a non ss/hg story!

I don't know how you could possibly bring them together but I'm along for the ride...

The longer and angstier (yes, not a real word, I know) the better.

I'm so hooked.

Reel me in!

This just gets better and better. I'm hooked on the suspense! Hermione's diary entries were fanastic, so in character for her. I like that Snape can see that the diary entries show she had no intention of telling Snape about the pregnancy (so she wasn't trying to ruin his life after all) and that it was Ginny's meddling that led to the chain of events. The plot twists are wonderful! I'm no less impatient than anyone else for updates, updates ;0) but like you said, good things come to those who wait and if you reveal everything in the beginning then there's no more story to tell. Draw it out, make it good, nail-biting reading! ;0) Sad to see Harry in such a state and that Ginny left him, but it's very realistic. Would love to see Hermione snap out of it and keep her son - she's a tough cookie, she is - but let's see where the story takes this. I can't wait for more! :0) I love a good cliff-hanger.

::sits back with popcorn and waits for more chapters:: ;0)

Well love the story!!! so now things i do hope are going to start to change some. poor severus to loss all that i feel very sorry for him. but i think he is being stuborn and just plain mean. i cant believe that he would do that to her! or any one for that matter. though i am wonder what is with hermiones research, it seems a bit careless or even ruthless to evertrying to experiment on a living until better results occur. but i am assuming that you have a reason. i am really looking forward to what will happen to severus now. i do feel sorry for harry that was terrible what and how ginny just left harry, but i am assuming that they were having trouble before just harry was too blind to notice i suppose. well now that i have totally blabed away i will let you write. :) until next time!

I was kinda on the fence about this story (I mean, I couldn't help disliking Nalina and hating Snape for acting that way towards Hermione...), but chapters 9 & 10 have me hooked. I guess asking for more so soon after getting three chapters is asking a bit much? *begs*

Oh dear, I'm not sure I can keep reading this. Your Severus is horrible and I don't like this Nalina person at all. I get all tightened when I read your story. I'm beginning to think, I'll just stop reading and come back when you're done to check out the ending.
I don't like to read about babies being treated like the way Severus is treating his and Hermione's "bastard."
I have a friend whose ex-boyfriend did the same thing to her, and it wasn't pretty. He's no longer in the child's life at all (and its many years later) but that little bit of your story is too close to home. Your Severus is really reminding me of this other guy, who was at the end of the day a really mean and selfish man.
Not that I usually leave reviews like this, but your Severus is really looking out to be a terrible man in this one. Maybe I'll wait until your next chapter and see...

I'm even more convinced now upon reading these last three chapters so far, that this is strongly leaning towards fate. Yet even fate can have a messed up idea of how things should go. I'm looking forward to reading more. My thoughts are focused on her diary, what she wrote in it, what clues are there to help him find her, where she will go, and her thoughts on the pregnancy. 39 weeks is a long time to have to make a decision about a baby. And will she change her mind in the time it takes for him to find her and get her to sign the papers? And will his change also after reading her diary? So many questions!

Can't wait for the update,

Wolf

OMG - Are you kidding me?

What's happening? Are you mad? How can you possibly get them together after this?

A brilliantly written tribute to tragedy.

:::stomps foot:::

Now where's my happy ending?!