rate_review Reviews

It's a great story, just need someone to beta. The spelling mistakes and bad grammer does take some away from the story. But i think it's great anyway.

Hello =]
So I've been reading this story for quite a while ( Sorry for not reviewing, though I might have but I dont remember =S ) and I have made a decision. This story is not good, ITS AWESOME! I LOVE it!!!!!! So, to show how much I love your detailed originality and thrilling plot, I have... made you a weird-picturey-thingy-that-I-don't-know-what-to-call! :)
Link-
http://img14.imageshack.us/img14/1537/dancingwithdragons.jpg

Also if you are looking for a beta I would love to help!

G&ST
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It is hard to know how to really respond to this story! First of all, I'm loving the story line. Draco/Hermione is my favourite pairing. I love the direction that you're going with the story, and how dark it is, coupled with redeeming factors such as Draco and Hermione's "friendship", etc.

At the beginning of the first chapter you said you didn't have a beta. That was the biggest mistake you made. Up until about the 10th chapter you didn't spell Neville's name correctly even once. It was always variations of "Neval" and "Nevel". When Hermione was suffering the effects of the Crucio curse, that was also spelled incorrectly ("Circio"?). There are other various misuses of words ("crease" instead of "caress") which are really distracting to the story. If a reader has to stop and think about what word you actually meant to use, it really breaks the flow of the story and makes it hard to get back into.

However, I don't want to discourage you. I keep reading because I really like your story and I want to see where you go with it, and I can overlook the minor problems re: spelling, word misuse, etc. I do think it would be wise if you had a beta go back and read/edit for you, as your story could be near flawless with some minor fixes.

That being said, I'm looking forward to future chapters :)

OMG girl what a cliffie you want to kill us with a heartattack? This is getting too good.. more please and please we need Harry and Ron just for a bid or a glimse... or maybe as the rescuers? LOVE IT!!!!!!!!!!

Interesting start. I really like your writing style even if the Draco/Hermione head girl and boy thing is a little overplayed. Also, other than a lack of commas and a few spelling errors here and there it was quite good. Now I'm off to read more chapters!

omgggggg no cliffhangers please D=.seriously that is so unfair. talented authors shouldnt be allowed to make cliffhangers =[. It's probably dangerous to some people.... what if someone was really into this story and you did that? their mind might explode... like mine just did =[ please update soon... love the writing =] keep it up
no mroe cliffs though please D=

HOLY CRAP! I am so hooked that I think I log on everyday to see if there are new updates. I can't wait to read what happens next. The suspense is killing me.

and yet another amazing chapter =]hope you do an update soon =[. the worst part is waiting on a great author to release her next piece of the series ;)

This was sweet and enchanting!! We need more and more..

Lordy that was so amazing and tender and emotional. It was really lovely....I'm surprised their first names didn't slip out at some point. ooooo, don't tease us with that last line...show us....LOL