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October 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ARGH!!!! Your so EVIL!!! I can't wait to see what's going to happen to poor Harry now... will Wyatt come to his rescue along with the charmed ones? Oh, I hope so!
Please, please update chapter 8 soon ^_^
Jan
Please, please update chapter 8 soon ^_^
Jan
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Damn it! NO! Oh I really want to hurt Minerva now! How dare she do that?! HArry better not get dragged back! And if he does I bet Wyatt will have something to say on the subject, especially since he knows HArry is meant to be his! Damn it! That was an evil twist!
Still though, on the whole you write really well. I only really scan read this chapter and I didn't see many emotions or getting into depth with Harry but with a chapter where he buys a house I don't suppose that's neccessary! Gods! I can't wait for the next update! I'd like to thank you for updating today too, none of my favourite stories on any of the sites I visited today have been updated in the last two days! (And I have over 100 favourite stories!) Keep writing!
Still though, on the whole you write really well. I only really scan read this chapter and I didn't see many emotions or getting into depth with Harry but with a chapter where he buys a house I don't suppose that's neccessary! Gods! I can't wait for the next update! I'd like to thank you for updating today too, none of my favourite stories on any of the sites I visited today have been updated in the last two days! (And I have over 100 favourite stories!) Keep writing!
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter!
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
damn it just when you think he got away this happens... cant wait to see what happens next...
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
CRAP!!! OH NO!!! I can't wait more for!!!
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Shessh Dumbles, just leave the poor guy alone! I wonder if Wyatt will be around when the Order shows up!
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
good chapter
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
As one of those awful reviewers that only reviews when she has something to say, I must point out somethings that bothered me with this chapter. Nothing big, but still it's on my mind and won't let go.
First: The quidditch-teams you have feels wrong, especially when you consider that the Falmouth Falcons was named after the town of Falmouth where the team has it's home. Insted you could call them the San Francisco Quails ("California Quail" = Californias state bird) or San Francisco Eagles. The same should be done for Canada's Puddlemere United even if it's unknown what Puddlemere United is named after. Perhaps you could just call it Canada United or something else. I'm convinced you are full of ideas.
Second: In the add you set the prices in diffrent currency. Why? It's a wizarding paper for the wizards and witches. Why are the price in dollars? And I have actually one more thing for you to think about that has with the houseprices to do. Why does the price for buying the house end in sikles and knuts? I have never seen someone sell a house for 2.458456,50 (Swedish Crowns). The houseprices I have seen is in even numbers. On the other hand the rental never is.
Third: I don't think that someone that sells things (if they are cars, a house or toilettpaper) would ever say: "We at the Wizarding Real Estate were beginning to fear that no one would be interested in the property." Talk about buyers market. With that information the buyer could lower the price considerbly.
Well...I hope you don't think I'm nagging, I only want to give you my opinions what I, as a reader, think about you work and hopefully help you evolve as a writer. This ofcours is only something for you to think about and have in mind in the feature. As always, it's the one writing who makes the final decision.
First: The quidditch-teams you have feels wrong, especially when you consider that the Falmouth Falcons was named after the town of Falmouth where the team has it's home. Insted you could call them the San Francisco Quails ("California Quail" = Californias state bird) or San Francisco Eagles. The same should be done for Canada's Puddlemere United even if it's unknown what Puddlemere United is named after. Perhaps you could just call it Canada United or something else. I'm convinced you are full of ideas.
Second: In the add you set the prices in diffrent currency. Why? It's a wizarding paper for the wizards and witches. Why are the price in dollars? And I have actually one more thing for you to think about that has with the houseprices to do. Why does the price for buying the house end in sikles and knuts? I have never seen someone sell a house for 2.458456,50 (Swedish Crowns). The houseprices I have seen is in even numbers. On the other hand the rental never is.
Third: I don't think that someone that sells things (if they are cars, a house or toilettpaper) would ever say: "We at the Wizarding Real Estate were beginning to fear that no one would be interested in the property." Talk about buyers market. With that information the buyer could lower the price considerbly.
Well...I hope you don't think I'm nagging, I only want to give you my opinions what I, as a reader, think about you work and hopefully help you evolve as a writer. This ofcours is only something for you to think about and have in mind in the feature. As always, it's the one writing who makes the final decision.
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
good chapter with cliffie. :-)
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October 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh my god, you are KILLING me!!!!! i cant WAIT for the next chapter!!!!!