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for Ultimate Betrayal

by KaiDragon

schedule September 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Gods, those Malfoys are prats. Poor Aiden for having to deal with them, no wonder he exploded. And poor Severus too, I wouldn
schedule September 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love the story but didn't he just let something slip.
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love this chapter, and thank you for the flashback, I can't wait to see what you do in the next chapter.

PLease, please, Pretty please update soon!!!!!!!!!!!!

~LadyVaughan
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schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i love it
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schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Another great chapter - wonderfully written as always, and darn addicting.
Cant get enough...and cant wait to read more.
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
whoa that was great i really did enjoy it
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Awe....Wyatt and Harry are sooo cute!
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i have the feeling that when harry tells wyatt what happen that wyatt is going to be PISSSED and harry may have a hard time keeping him calm. cant wait to read more
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
ooohh! Finally Harry's going to tell Wyatt about his past.

Are you going to pair Draco up with someone?

Update soon!
schedule September 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I lOVE YOUR STORY! I usaully don't review unless I really love the story, The PLOT or what I've been makeing of it is well figure out and I don't see any spell mistake's but maybe one or two. I do have a question dough, I belive Wyatt will be fine with his past but what about Wyatt's family, I mean family is importnant to a person and as close as Wyatt is to his family wouldn't they have a say about it, I mean your haveing Harry worried about Wyatt but what about his family? You said they had met him and like him, can you do a flashback to the meeting? Maybe that way my question is anwer as am sure am not explaing the question how it sound in my head! lol! Now your writeing is wonderful and the plot is good, I don't think I have seen a crossover like this one, The only thing I can tell you to do when your writeing is to not let the reader's take over, yes our point of view allow's you to see all angle's but remember it's your story and you should be happy about the plot and the pairing's and while you might make a few changes for a reader make it the ones you would have make anyway and that it goes along with your plot, even my flashback if you don't have it in the plot and it doesn't fit don't put it in, I don't mind, Sorry for the rant it's just I get to reading a really good story and the plot line is soooo good but then The Writer start's going what everyone want him/her to do and It lose's the plot you know? and way I love your story and if you have any poll's I will vote my idea's then. PLEASE, PLEASE PRETTY PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!!!!!!
Keep up the wonderful writeing!
~LadyVaughan