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Whats next, whats next? Can you email me when you put up another chapter, please?

I love this story, but I miss it. :( Please update soon.

This is an awesome story! I love it!

Are you updating anytime soon?

Wow, this story is the best HP/Charmed crossover but at the same time, it's the weakest due to Harry and Wyatt being too nice and kind toward enemies..I mean, c'mon, it's just so weak!!

I would examine Wyatt or Harry destroying dumboer, ron, heormei magical core and turning them into non-magical persons or something or do something against them, not all weak and stuff..

Sincerely,

Ok, WTF is it about Harry giving money to mloly and arthur?? I mean, in the beginning, you said that the family was smug about him being thrown into Azkaban and now he's giving them money?? That's just plain made no sense and stupd!!

Plus Sirus and Remus..


Those are the only two factors that I found wrong with your story so far..Just plan stupid..

Otherwise, so far it's good..

Sincerely,

Now Harry thought of sending them elsewhere to live?? I mean, I thought it was stupid of Harry to NOT send them to somewhere else to live, seeing that he has so many other properties..It just seems pointless overall..

Sincerely,

Oh, the plot is thickening... I can't wait to see what's going to happen once they get to America...
Though I got to admit that I wasn't to pleased with the reaction that the Royal family took upon Aiden and Wyatt...

Please update chapter 52 soon ^_^

Jan

First off I

Well there are good parts and so so parts in this fic. All around it is intriguing and well worth reading adventure story. Two things distract from the over all tale. One is the misuse, missing word, or incorrectly worded sentences that appear in every chapter, making one struggle to figure out what was trying to be said. Better editing or a beta would fix this.

The second, is Wyatt. While I admit to never watching Charms after Chris arrived, I find Wyatt to be an arrogant husband who does not appear to know what the word EQUAL means although he took vows to those very words. He treats his HUSBAND as if he were another subject and not his EQUAL. If you did not want Harry to be an equal you shouldn't have said so in the story. I think a bolt in the ass after the scene with the wizard and the letter would have served Wyatt right and instead Harry caves like a wimp. Bedroom submission is one thing, the rest of your life is another. Wyatt tends to treat Harry like a beloved slave to be ordered around. His doll. A consort is more than an arm ornament and a mind spy.