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Wow! That was waaaay different than the plot I was assuming, but it's absolutely delightful! I hope you can update again soon! That cliffie has me hanging on for the next chapter desperately. Until the next chapter! :)

This is a wonderful story you have created. If you need help with grammar etc I am willing to be a beta for you. This story has real potential and it is such a pity that your translation difficulties affect it.
If you would like help contact me at: emeralddragonsword@yahoo.com.au
Looking forward to the next chapter :)

Intriguing... hope you update chapter 3 soon, I wonder who's this person that through themselves at him.

I would recommend trying to find a good beta. I like your vision for the story and see a great deal of potential; however, I could not finish the first chapter due to the excessive errors in grammar. This is making a potentially excellent story disjointed and difficult to read. I get the feeling that English is not your native language. If this is the case, a beta would be very beneficial to your growth as a writer.

A Friendly Reminder

Just thought I'd leave you a note to let you know your disclaimer is lacking. According to the Terms of Service you need to include that you are in fact making no money from writing this story, and that you do not own the people involved. Also it helps if you specify the fandom you are writing about.

Even though this story is about fictional characters, it needs to be known that they are not yours and you