rate_review Reviews

I'm reviewing before reading the last chapter, in response to your a/n... the truth is, as someone who speaks another language entirely (though I don't know which one) your grammar is actually pretty good... not difficult to follow at all (minus a few stumbles when I'm too tired to be awake but am still reading all that lovely lovely drarry slash...) but if you were NOT an ESL, then yes... your grammar is atrocious ( >^_^< )

but those that matter understand and it's not a problem at all...

(by the way, I adore your story... it's cute, and I just want to squeeze your insecure little Draco)

omg super cute!! and your writing is awesome so don't pay any attention to whoever had the nerve to say that shit. can't wait for the next chapter!!!

hi this is wonderful! i like this story a lot can't wait to see what happens next! hopefully smut? XD

Damn you and your cliffhangers! *pout* Now you have to update again soon!
Re: the grammar thing, I agree that CONSIDERING your first language is not English, you're doing VERY well with what you have done and remember, most people (I know I wouldn't) wouldn't have the courage to even write or post a story on the internet in a language they're not 100% familiar with so good on you for that!
If you are really concerned though, I could have a look over a few chapters to come or some of the ones already posted and email you some pointers? Let me know...
Anyway, looking forward to the rest of the story and I know my reading fun hasn't been lessened by a few grammatical errors here and there!
Stef

Dont get me wrong, I really am loving this but Im curious to know. Is your first language something other than english? Its just your word placement and grammar is just really um...off...Im not flaming you cuz I love the plot and all its just all the grammatical errors make it a little hard to concentrate on the story cuz I have to keep correcting them in my head in order for the sentence to make sense. Do you have a beta by chance?

Yes, we should take you to the chopping block for doing this to us.

I like your story, is sweet, romantic and very light on the angst. Angst is a wonderful thing ( I am reading Barking dogs don't bite) but sometimes is necessary to take a break from it and refresh. Speaking about refreshing, if you stress out about every comment on your grammar there wont be much refreshing; will there? Just remember that you know how to read and write in two languages and you are obviously creative enough to write a story in a language that is not your native. Furthermore you are brave enough to make your stories public taking the risk of rejection. Try not to worry about so much and remember sometimes people do not read the author notes and therefore miss your warning.


Are massages really painful? My husband was trying to convince me to get one for my neck ache but it does not sound all that pleasant, maybe I should just take two Motrins for now.

I LOVE this story. Very original and exciting. I love the emotions and the angst! To answer your question: yes, your grammar is difficult to read sometimes-- HOWEVER, you're doing really well for someone whose first language isn't English. I honestly think I know what's happening. I'm assuming that your first language is a romance language? French, Spanish, Italian? Unlike those languages English has a strict order in which the noun and verb need to go. The difficultly in the grammar is arising with the word order in most cases-- sometimes it's verb conjugation.

I don't think there's any need for you to worry. If someone reviewed you and said that your writing is awful, then they don't deserve to read your wonderful work (and I bet you anything that THEY couldn't write this well in your language). This issue can be easily fixed by having a native English speaker beta your work. I'm leaving my email and offering my services for this fic. If you'd like me to send suggestions for the chapters already posted and look over future chapters, please email me.

Please keep up the great work!

Yay you updated!! *glomps* wiiee thank youu!!! i cant wait till the next chap!!!! oohhh

I don't know if I missed it, but when did Hermione hear Draco tell them about Harry writing about Dust? Just a tiny something I noticed. Otherwise, I love your story, and your grammar is okay, really. I'm not the best to judge, because English is only my second language, but I have definitely read stories written by native speakers that were A LOT worse.

very very good chapters keep up the good work and
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