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rawr. i wanna know what happens. and your grammar is fine! i had honestly forgotten that english wasn't your first language. i actually get reviews complaining about mine and english is my native language. there are just people out there who like to nitpick and make others doubt themselves but you are fine. trust me.

THAT CLIFFY WAS THE MOST EVIL THING I HAVE DEALT WITH IN AGES!!!!!. Also, check that last sentence. The words are....backwards.
LOVED it. The info on the massage types was illuminating.

*cookies*

~Sophie Max-Anderson

Hum...so I miss a few interesting chapters, and...I really don't see Harry as a massager, which must feel very very good...

Actually if we imagine the conversation they are taking...one being nude while the other is fully clothed, together with oiled body and sweaty chest...please update soon!

Ah Zoo, that is so mean leaving a cliffy like that. lol. I just clicked on AFF and saw your name and read your first four chapters. I really liked it. As for the reviewer that said it was atrocious and hard to follow.....Although I found some grammar issues, it wasn't that bad I think. I was able to follow it quite easily. I have read far, far worse. Maybe sometime later you can have someone read it over, but I wouldn't worry so much about it now. I thought it was okay.

If you can, can you please let me know when you update? You probably have my email somewhere. It hasn't been that long since we last chatted. lol

~tas

Hey ZooArmy,
your story`s really wonderfull- I like thid massage idea a lot!
From my point of view language isn`t a problem.
Maybe `cause I`m no native speaker as well? ;-)
No matter, please keep writing!
Looking forward the next chapter(s)...
I send you a hug,
Alex

I'll do more than slaughter, if theres no hotness in the next chapter :P

my mouth was open in one big oh my god right at the end. i swear draco is freaking dense!!!!! oh hahaha lol. *wipes away tear* NAICE!

very very goodkeep going and post soon
bye bye

this is a great story, I did want to comment about what you said about the reviewer and your English. First off, you have a lot of talent, or else you wouldn't come up with this and go to the effort that you do. Second, what shows thru when I read isn't so much mistakes as, there would have been a better (soother) way to say something. That is why you need someone to proof read for you. Just little tweeks to make it flow better from an English standpoint. For example, "lay on your stomach on the table" - too many "ons" I would have just said "lay face down" then there are a few times when word order is out of whack, it is just an English thing, and nothing to sweat about, but a 15 min. proof by a "dyed in the wool" English speaker would solve all of those. Please don't listen to reviewers who don't have all the facts, we will still all read and enjoy your work, but if you would like a - I hate to use the word Beta, lets just say an "English" checker, I would be happy to do this for you. I listed by email above, if you are interested, if not, don't let the few get you down, I can hardly say more that "my pencil is blue" in French let alone write a story in another language. My hat's off to you and your talent!

Sooo need chapter 5!!! To be honest, the story isn't hard to read. Sometimes you arrange the words wrong but who doesn't. Even someone who speaks, reads and writes English makes these mistakes. I really enjoy your story and encourage you to continue.