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August 24, 2008 at 12:00 AM
The story was really good - the plot was interesting and quite unique, you seemed to have put a lot of effort in, and your spelling and grammar was good too. I would say though that - although you have a lot of potential as a writer - you might want to focus on adding some detail to your work in future, the sentences were short and lacked information so the story read as a list rather than a narrative. I do look forward to more from you in future though.