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I felt sorry and happily surprised to find your story. Sorry, because it was already part 20 and happily surprised to find such a beautiful and good flowing story, an wonderful gem. Your portrayal of Snape is well done and well worded and an absolute joy to read. Spend nearly 3 hours to read it from start to this point and it is a time well spend. I like your way with words and descriptions of various situations. Also the insight of Snape's past life and memories, blended with the present and future what could be, kept me sitting on the edge of my chair and feeling the need to finish reading it. I hope you will update soon, as to satisfy my growing curiosity to see how this will all develop. Thank you for sharing this with us.

Beautiful. I'm in love already. It's hard to find any thing good to read any more but you have given me something and I thank you for that. For now, I shall continue reading this so far wonderfully written piece of fanfiction and will periodically come to tell you what I think and to further lick your boots to a shine so bright it blinds people when the sun light catches them.

(Meds make me kinda loopy but seriously, I really do like your story so far.)

I know, overusing the phrase a bit, but beautiful. Very real, I think. I favor your writing style for some reason though I cannot put my finger on it exactly. It's a Harry Potter fic, I know, but it's different. It's a life time of different if that makes any sense what so ever. I love Joesph Pony and the imp is just adorable. I cannot wait to see what you have in store for our favorite Potion's Master and your wonderfully developed characters that fit so well in to your story. I love how Stella is so young but isn't overly innocent. A lot of people will make children out to be innocent creatures and overly cute when most of them are crafty (which isn't a bad thing). You've given both the kids (though I suspect one of them thinks hes an adult) a not so bright past and it affects their personalities. Being raised in poverty you get jaded so early on in life to the horrors of the world and in a way you've brought that out in the two. It's real.

And I'm sorry you didn't get any reviews for your first chapter. I never do either but I promise that your story is interesting to at least one person anyway. Please don't ever give up because you truly deserve more praise than you have gotten so far. I would not change a thing.

Wonderful.



Love how you integrated American History with J.K. Rowling's British Magical history. Very unique. You don't really see stories that do American Wizards very well, they pretty much keep it the same. I think the cultures would be different you know? Even in the real world, our two cultures are very different. I'm usually a bit sketchy about stories that take place in America or involve an American mainly because my attempts have failed but you've done such a wonderful job with it.

Also I love how you're able to get into Snape's head but yet the text is distant enough it doesn't overcome the whole story.

Seriously, how long did it take you to get this good at writing?

(Sorry but when I find a good story I can't stop reviewing)

Well, I guess Severus ticked off Antonia at the end of this chapter. She always seems to get over it fairly quickly though. I hope the lawyer can help Severus. I am slightly confused with the Percy Weasly stuff, What does he have over on Severus or the order? Does he have a dark mark too? Please update soon!

This is at the same time gritty and sweet, and completely original. I love the Native American aspect, and above all, that Severus is the Man Who Lived.

I was so hoping that the nice looking man would turn out to be Antonia's brother. Joseph Pony and the werewolf sure seem to be getting cozy. Severus seems to have a soft spot for her too. Might we see some "fire works" when the fire works go off? Great writing!

I do love this story so. Sorry,I havn't been able to read for a while, and it has taken me several days of reading to catch up. I love all of the flashbacks. It really gives more insight into why Severus is Severus. I can't wait to find out all of Antonia's mysteries. Finally maybe he is reaching out to her.Can't wait to read more.

(Chapter 10)

I liked the glimpses into Severus' everyday life, watching Stella and Char playin the water, lusting after Antonia when she joined them. His reaction to Joseph Pony's teasing. His consternation at Stella's question. And then came the scary part. The psychotic break and the memory of past horrors. You write this so well, fit the flashbacks in seamlessly. Well done. I liked this chapter very much.

I have just finished reading your other story from this AU, The Slytherin Redemption, and now this one as well, and I love them both. You are an excellent writer. I love the depth and breadth of your stories, I like that you do research. Your characters are complex and vividly written, even the OC's, which is quite rare. Your characterization of Snape is spot on. Great job, really. I am looking forward to an update.