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June 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Awww, what a purty picture they make all snuggled up in bed!
I liked the way this chapter flowed very much. The sneek peek into Milicent's wanking session was very funny. It made me think of this short-lived HBO show with Lisa Kudrow a few years ago. She was a TV actress hoping for a comeback (It was called The Comeback) and she gets this sitcom gig as the Mrs. Roper-style character whose running gag line was, "I did not need to see that!. Egads, it was priceless. Perfect delivery, you really had to be there.
Anyway, exciting developments here and I'm really curious about the budding slaves and the rituals for being chosen by a Master. Harry has a lot to consider with so much responsibility on his plate, but then, we know how good he is at that saving people thing. He's so warm with them that I can see why Daphne would be ecstatic she had been bound to him. What a sweetie Domme. Wondering how their first threesome is going to go.
I liked the way this chapter flowed very much. The sneek peek into Milicent's wanking session was very funny. It made me think of this short-lived HBO show with Lisa Kudrow a few years ago. She was a TV actress hoping for a comeback (It was called The Comeback) and she gets this sitcom gig as the Mrs. Roper-style character whose running gag line was, "I did not need to see that!. Egads, it was priceless. Perfect delivery, you really had to be there.
Anyway, exciting developments here and I'm really curious about the budding slaves and the rituals for being chosen by a Master. Harry has a lot to consider with so much responsibility on his plate, but then, we know how good he is at that saving people thing. He's so warm with them that I can see why Daphne would be ecstatic she had been bound to him. What a sweetie Domme. Wondering how their first threesome is going to go.
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June 2, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great chapter! Loved the screaming! So didn't need the visual!
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May 27, 2009 at 12:00 AM
great chapter
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May 26, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Great read so far.
It has smut and plot! Two of my favorite things. =]
Update, update, update!!
It has smut and plot! Two of my favorite things. =]
Update, update, update!!
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May 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Hey,first thing, did you C+P this or add your file? 'Cause AFF's program is wreaking havoc with your characters, namely the quotation marks and apostrophes. It is really distracting in the dialogue. I don't know why it does that.
Anyway, on to the story--I like Hermione wanting to feel pushed and talking to Harry about becoming virtually his plaything. The fact that they are having a dialogue about it shows that the Hermione we know and love is still there, even as she has begun to change into her new role with determination. They certainly needed to set some parameters on just how rough was rough in both their minds, and her shock the next morning as Harry verbally abused her as he came and pissed on her was authentic. That she loved the treatment, however, means we'll get a lot more dirty talking Dom Harry treating her like the dirty whore she is :-)
I am really liking that you are bringing in Dolohov's curse into this because I'd like to see what the after-effects of it are. It was brushed under the rug pretty quickly in OotP, but I always felt there would be lingering damage with such a nasty hex. The fact that the scene showed how sickly worried Harry was for her in the moment gave it a nice bit of intimacy, so returning to it to see how Harry's guilt might work into it considering he is wont to take on blame when the ppl he cares about are hurt will be interesting to see in light of his new mien. I admire the way you always stress how much Harry loves and cherishes Hermione and takes responsibility for her well-being so seriously. Being Hermione's Master had really matured him in a good way. It makes their tendencies more believable because I can see how you took the seeds of their characters to heart as you molded them to fit your roles for them. I think Harry is a natural Dom right out of canon.
Looking forward to seeing how Daphne will fit into their little love nest. Good job on the first-time anal for Hermione. Of course that little bitch would love it; she's such a cock whore. *smiles evilly*
Anyway, on to the story--I like Hermione wanting to feel pushed and talking to Harry about becoming virtually his plaything. The fact that they are having a dialogue about it shows that the Hermione we know and love is still there, even as she has begun to change into her new role with determination. They certainly needed to set some parameters on just how rough was rough in both their minds, and her shock the next morning as Harry verbally abused her as he came and pissed on her was authentic. That she loved the treatment, however, means we'll get a lot more dirty talking Dom Harry treating her like the dirty whore she is :-)
I am really liking that you are bringing in Dolohov's curse into this because I'd like to see what the after-effects of it are. It was brushed under the rug pretty quickly in OotP, but I always felt there would be lingering damage with such a nasty hex. The fact that the scene showed how sickly worried Harry was for her in the moment gave it a nice bit of intimacy, so returning to it to see how Harry's guilt might work into it considering he is wont to take on blame when the ppl he cares about are hurt will be interesting to see in light of his new mien. I admire the way you always stress how much Harry loves and cherishes Hermione and takes responsibility for her well-being so seriously. Being Hermione's Master had really matured him in a good way. It makes their tendencies more believable because I can see how you took the seeds of their characters to heart as you molded them to fit your roles for them. I think Harry is a natural Dom right out of canon.
Looking forward to seeing how Daphne will fit into their little love nest. Good job on the first-time anal for Hermione. Of course that little bitch would love it; she's such a cock whore. *smiles evilly*
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May 25, 2009 at 12:00 AM
good chapter the weird funky punctuational drove me insane though!
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May 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Very Nice! Great Chapter!
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May 19, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Oh, good, you got Harry's guilt complex going, I can totally see that.
I really liked how the girls all hovered around Hermione taking care of her like a real sisterhood. It must have been nice for Hermione, who I suspect was never "one of the girls" in cliques throughout her schooling to finally have that kind of bond and camaraderie with a group of girls. Harry sort of overseeing them all just emphasized his complete alpha Dom presence in the proceeding. His caring for her was so deeply felt, and I like how you really made the stark contrast between what was play and what was punishment. So often in BDSM stories here, there is the whole punishing thing going on when its merely play and it makes the interaction more like a romance bodice ripper than an actual D/s dynamic. I want to see love and devotion in the mix, but duh, the whole point of being in that sort of relationship in the first place is to experience the pleasure of pain and restraint from your master. I don't like it when the sub is constantly being deceitful and trying to top from the bottom. That kind of power dragging shit just makes it feel less honest and less about real commitment.
So, considering how Hermione wasn't exactly eager about giving Luna a good cunt licking, I was surprised by her zealous appreciation of Daphne. Perhaps there is hope for her yet that she'll get into pleasing another woman for her Master. Really eager to see how that first meeting with the new sub goes down.
Very nicely done! Lots of good feelings all around after all that angst in the last one. So glad that Hermione knows she is very loved.
I really liked how the girls all hovered around Hermione taking care of her like a real sisterhood. It must have been nice for Hermione, who I suspect was never "one of the girls" in cliques throughout her schooling to finally have that kind of bond and camaraderie with a group of girls. Harry sort of overseeing them all just emphasized his complete alpha Dom presence in the proceeding. His caring for her was so deeply felt, and I like how you really made the stark contrast between what was play and what was punishment. So often in BDSM stories here, there is the whole punishing thing going on when its merely play and it makes the interaction more like a romance bodice ripper than an actual D/s dynamic. I want to see love and devotion in the mix, but duh, the whole point of being in that sort of relationship in the first place is to experience the pleasure of pain and restraint from your master. I don't like it when the sub is constantly being deceitful and trying to top from the bottom. That kind of power dragging shit just makes it feel less honest and less about real commitment.
So, considering how Hermione wasn't exactly eager about giving Luna a good cunt licking, I was surprised by her zealous appreciation of Daphne. Perhaps there is hope for her yet that she'll get into pleasing another woman for her Master. Really eager to see how that first meeting with the new sub goes down.
Very nicely done! Lots of good feelings all around after all that angst in the last one. So glad that Hermione knows she is very loved.
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May 16, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Well, this story has certainly been a nice surprise. I am intrigued by your writing method, now that I finally get an explanation. I have to admit, I have tried to read this story on two different occasions but would only get through a chapter or two before getting impatient with the misspelling and grammatical errors. Not capitalizing a name is just not right, in my book, but if it's all because of the way you are approaching this writing exercise, than I can deal. Regardless of those mistakes, I thought that first chapter was perhaps a bit too literal for my taste, the way that Hermione was able to so perfectly sum up her needs and wants like that. Also, things like Luna's intuitiveness going to an almost prescient nature. However, because I love Harry Dom stories, and because I like it when Hermione is his sub, plus the added bonus of having Luna possibly in the mix, I gave this another shot.
I'm really liking what you're doing here a lot. You are hitting a lot of my kinks, I gotta say, so much so that I would love it if you read my own story that I have posted here. We obviously think a lot alike. How thoughtful Harry was in preparing Hermione's punishment was unexpected, but really admirable. And now he might take Daphne as a sub, too! Wow. This might get very, very interesting.
I can hardly wait til Harry takes Hermione's virginity, though. Seal the deal, as it were. They make a good BDSM couple; almost as good as Harry/Luna. Almost :)
Loved the last chapter. Man, Dom!Harry is so freaking hot.
I'm really liking what you're doing here a lot. You are hitting a lot of my kinks, I gotta say, so much so that I would love it if you read my own story that I have posted here. We obviously think a lot alike. How thoughtful Harry was in preparing Hermione's punishment was unexpected, but really admirable. And now he might take Daphne as a sub, too! Wow. This might get very, very interesting.
I can hardly wait til Harry takes Hermione's virginity, though. Seal the deal, as it were. They make a good BDSM couple; almost as good as Harry/Luna. Almost :)
Loved the last chapter. Man, Dom!Harry is so freaking hot.
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May 15, 2009 at 12:00 AM
I love this story and am constantly checking for updates. Unfortunately, too few people go with any form of a dominant Harry.
One thing I don't understand. In chapter 7, Harry gave Hermione a collar, yet I haven't heard it mentioned since. Why is that?
One thing I don't understand. In chapter 7, Harry gave Hermione a collar, yet I haven't heard it mentioned since. Why is that?