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This was freaking painful. I read the first chapter and thought, 'nah...no way it can be any worse' and then IT GOT WORSE. I was going to grin and bear through this, but if the first two chapters are this God awful I don't think I can make it through thirty one more.

I am three chapters into this story and I'm afraid to say I think I'm going to have to stop reading. I could live with Barty possibly having an evil twin, but then writing him in as a Marauder, giving him a Scottish accent when none of the other Crouches a rather formal London accent was just too much. In a way you just wrote a new character that you thought would compliment Hermione, played by David Tennant, and completely disregarded the original Barty Crouch. I am a fan of David Tennant as well but the insertion of a totally new Barty Crouch, not even one remorseful for his past just feels wrong to me, like a horrible cheat in regards to making this kind of pairing work successfully. I'm sure you've had plenty of others who love this story but sadly i'm not among them. Take care.

Excellent. I enjoyed reading this story.

An excellent chapter. I can't wait to read more.

You write very well, for the most part. However, when writing smut... You use the word "suckle," or "suckled," or "suckling" so frequently that it really detracts from everything else

Excellent. I look forward to reading more.

Excellent. I can't wait to read the next chapter. Update soon.
I still think that you should make Barty's real name Bartemius and not Bariums.

An excellent chapter. I can't wait to read more.

Excellent. I look forward to reading more. I am glad that Sirius and Barty will be with their wives for the school year.

Excellent. I can't wait to read more.