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Oh my goodness this story is insane. So well written and with such an intricate and well thought out storyline. I am super impressed and thoroughly enjoyed it all! Thanks for sharing :)

I love this whole fic, but this was unquestionably my favourite line in it:

“I remember Lily Potter as a insignificant face, James Potter’s plain wife…”

A realistic ending, with Hermione presumably considered guilty the rest of her life. Good luck explaining the story to their kids years later. Hermione's reasons for not defending herself - revenge on her kids from the kids of those who died, amongst other reasons - were good.

It is difficult to believe that the Knights would no longer be needed though. Avarice never dies. Neither does the supply of well-trained law enforcement officers who are happy to (like most of us) just take orders.

Good choice making Ron the villain. I doubt he could be smart enough to plot, since he was born stupid, but hey...

I did feel sorry for Percy though, so desperate for family approval...

It was a pity Percy and Hermione never dated for long. Why was that, btw? It does seem Percy/Hermione is one of the most unexplored ships.

More details on the Ministry politics would have been nice.

When was Hermione's womb fixed? I thought it might have been when they entered Avalon, but she and Sev didn't shag after that, did they?

I didn't see what Ginny was upset about Hermione's pregnancy instead of being happy. Then again, in the entire fic it seemed that Ginny only tolerated Hermione because of her connection with Harry (which I doubt she trusted as strictly platonic) and her guilt of her brother's post-miscarriage treatment of Hermione.

It was also unclear why Hermione even dated Ron for more than a month in the first place, but too many fanfiction writers (Rowling included - I don't consider last two books anything more than fanfiction) fall into that trap. I wonder how this fic would have been if Harry had been set up in the role of former-boyfriend-who-tried-to-take-over-the-world. It would have been a harder fic to write since Harry has a brain (ok, he's not dumber than Ron) and more importantly, less naturally suspicious by the Ministry & public.

I truly enjoyed your story, I found it refreshing and original. You need to seriously consider having it beta'd and post it on some of the HP specific sites. The readers of those sites often don't read unbeta'd stories and I am sure you would receive all kinds of love when they read this!

Spent the last few days reading your story and loving it. It is most excellent. There are a few typos running rampant throughout, but it did not distract from the imagination or the wonderfully told tale.

Oh how many hours of joy you have given me with this WONDERFUL tale.

Loves you for it.

Love Sonia :)

This was beyond brilliant, as your stories always are!

Fascinating so far. And 'enchiridion' - I love new words!

Excellent story!! It made me laugh and cry. I'm a big fan of stories involving Severus and Hermione. Great job. I did see some grammer error, but mostly a he when it was supposed to be her or something of that sort. The ending does leave it open for a sequel, which I hope you consider writing. Once again excellent job. I look forward to reading more of your stories.

you're so creative.