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i like the beginning it sounds good but like any story its just the beginning please add more

more.....

sounds good so far. just a few tips, some explainations are need with sirius and the whole not in azkaban but even still its a promising first chapter

Hi,

I enjoyed your first chapter, and would be interested in being a beta for you. I don't have a bunch of experience, but I beta the fic Asylum (HP/SS) which is on this site. Let me know if you're interested!

Saeadame

That is too funny, although I hope the penis exploding thing isn'y because of something the Durley's did to him. I like this story. Good plotline, Can't wait to see what happens next ;)

Is Sirius still Harry's godfather in your fic, or is he simply Severus' lover?
update

I like the idea but it makes for a confusing beginning. Obviously, the canon relationships both romantic and otherwise don't seem to match the original Harry Potter books so a little more concrete information about the roles that the characters play in each others lives would be appreciated. Like what is Sirius in this fic? No Azkaban so how is this timeline different? Those where just some of the questions that popped into my head. A bit more detail in the first chapter would probably serve you well. Besides that this is an interesting begining and hopeful there will be more to come.

very good start, can't wait to read more

Very good one shot

Good start.