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great story man.. i hiope ur still continuing it

Interesting idea. However, I do request that you do not make Luna a complete dominatrix bitch. If the goddess' personality affects or influences Luna's personality, that is fine. But if you are going to have the goddess' personality totally take over Luna's, then you have no point in have Luna in the story. You could keep things simpler and just have the goddess take over some unknown 6th year girl from Hogwarts. If you are going to use Luna, you have to keep some of her unusual personality. A very large part of this last chapter was not Luna. It was another personality in Luna's body. Keep Luna's pre-existing personality. Just let the goddess affect it--not override and destroy it.

I don't mind stories that have some of the less common sexual acts performed. It can make them interesting or more entertaining. But, if not done well, it can also ruin them... especially if the story takes characters to far out of character with no real character evolution. If you want to make Harry submissive and get off on being bound, gagged, and clamped, then that is fine... if you have a reason for a strong character to suddenly become so submissive. In general, I hate stories in which Harry is always completely submissive, or Harry is extremely abusive, or other nice/relaxed characters (like Luna) act like bitches. You gave almost no reason for Harry to be so sexually excited from just being bound and gagged like that. Because of that and the way you wrote Luna, I did not enjoy this last chapter very much.

Poor Harry he will be in a long ride with this two.... Funny in part ... More please

That ending would have infuriated me, had I been in Harry's place. If someone ties you up, promises they'll finish you off and then doesn't... I'd be a pissed Harry Potter, and I'd express that displeasure quite vocally.

Not bad work, but could you make sure that Harry is in control is the future and NOT luna or hermione.

Ok I confess, the name never catch my attention, but reading this two chapters hook me or more... So keep them coming.

Overall, I like the story. It's fun. However, one thing that I don't like is that you had Luna and Hermione use a spell to make Harry dream about having sex with them. I think they should have done it themselves, in person, or not at all. By casting a spell, they were doing something without his knowledge to get him to do something they wanted. That is manipulation (although mild in this case), and I hate when characters (that are NOT the antagonists and villains in a story) manipulate the protagonists and heroes in stories. This is not a major problem in the story.... its just a pet-peeve of mine.

When you had Luna and Hermione go to a BSDM club in the last chapter, I was afraid you were going to put in a massive D/s BSDM scene that took things to the limit. I am glad that was not the case. I have seen several stories that were (in my opinion) completely ruined because the authors wanted to experiment in in writing BSDM and just took things way too far just to attempt to add "shock value" or to show a "hidden side" to a shy character's personality.

Keep up the good work. I look forward to your next chapter.

very nice, keep up the good work.

I love Harry/Luna fics! Thanks for writing it :-)

please please update soon i would love to read more .. later for now

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