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Good story! About your question, I think skipping it and going right to the day after will be better if you don't think you will be able to do a good job with the mating. Perhaps you can just have Harry remember/comment a bit about the experience instead. But really it's up to you. I mean, you do have to start somewhere right? So if you wish to give it a try, go for it, and should it be bad I am sure you will get some reviews telling you so, so you can at least work with that to write a better scene next time. Anyways, I hope you update again soon and good luck with the next chapter! ^_^

nice fic, i really like it, though this last chapter has some spelling mistakes, and it really needs more description, also Fenrir character is a lil ooc, too soft; and this chapters are too short!! i just want more, dont take long to update please!

Ok ok Ok so do there Mating i would so love it! Please Keep Harry And Finar(sorry if Spelled wrong) Alive and going!!!

Personally, I would much prefer to see your first attempt at such a scene. Even if it isn't perfect, it is practice. And you know what they say about practice.

I have noticed several common spelling errors in your writing, most of which can be taken care of easily. For example, you refer to the full moon as the *fool* moon. Please understand that I am not being critical, I am instead giving you some helpful advice, writer to writer. I suggest that before you post a chapter as final, that you re-read said chapter to minimize the chance that spelling errors make it into the final product. I myself have done this many times, and it has helped me immeasureably.

I wish you a good night.

you should definitely write about their mating. With lenght and much detail. Also about Harrys first reactions to his wolf side. It would be nice if he would realise he can get along with his wolf as long as he doesn't try to hide or subdue the wolf inside. Also wolwes mate for life, so keep that in mind when you write.

Good chapter.

Totally prefer the first option. Good chapter.

a fenny and harry pooh fic can't possibly be complete without the first mating luv! just go wild! let your imagination roam and NEVER be hurried! the best sex scene are made from at least three days worth of thinking. ;)
just feel the moment and imagine yourself in harry and fenny's shoes. believe me it will come to you. gud luck on the mating luv;) its a-must so its not even a bloody question (wink)

be ambitious!

good story