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for Diamond in the Rough

by tsorg

schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
You've caught Lucius' hauteur perfectly. I do hope that he will develop some feeling for Hermione outside the ways he can use her. I loved the bit where she asked the test to be retaken. It was classic Hermione.

schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Cnapter 3:

I love Hermione's dinner ensemble. It will put a kink in Lucius' plans, I'm sure. It sounds like he might have bitten off more than he can chew by threatening Hermione.

schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
WHat a way to begin negotiations for a wedding. I loved it, the hexing, the jinxing the sexual tension and Lucius dishevelled. That was a great chapter.
schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I loved the clown suit comment. And thanks for making Hermione make an effort. It wouldn't be fair to either of them if she tried to sabotage herself at her wedding. I loved when Draco said his piece about her looks. IT was kind of gratifying to have him say that.
person Larrabee
schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I love the premise to this story. But I feel like Hermione is taking it lying down. And letting him mold her like his one personal doll. idk.
But I can't wait for more.
schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Lol, damn snarky possesive and domineering bastard. Can't wait for Hermione to put him in his place.
schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This was a wonderful chapter. I look forward to reading more.
schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
0.o

I don't know if I'm loving this.

Lucius is just absolutely ridiculous and Kingsley being such a complete ass about this law towards Hermione. And having Hermione strip in chapter 5...

It does have its great moments but for me Hermione just seems to be sitting back and taking it. And when she's not fighting, she's swooning over Lucius. However, no other reviewers seem to think this. So I fully intend to keep going and see what you have happen next.
person CoCoM
schedule August 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Yah for the consummation! Hermione is such a lucky witch. I can't wait to read about all of the creative ways she can take Lucius down a peg or two. *insert fan-girl giggle here*
P.S. Glad to hear I am not a total freak show with my "Poppet" fascination! (I noticed it made another appearance in this chapter and I liked it....A LO' !)
schedule August 9, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I like it. Please update soon.