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July 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I wonder how Draco's going to calm Harry down, i cant wait for the next chapter! update soon!
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July 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Smooth Draco! Real smooth! Soooo need chapter 6!!!
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July 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*What will Harry do when he discovers Lucius is ordered to kill Draco, help him of course.* LOL, the funniest line ever! I don't think you meant what you wrote: That Harry would help Lucius to kill Draco...
And now I'll start reading the story, I hope you will correct that funny summary...
And now I'll start reading the story, I hope you will correct that funny summary...
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July 29, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, three chapters long planning to hide Draco in Shrieking Jack are just two chapters too much. Besides, Snape knows how to get there, why not tell him at once? Harry is not stupid, he would have to hide him at Grimmauld Place 12, that's a real hideout, not Shrieking Jack. Try to cut it shorter or at least concentrate it to less chapters, you are repeating things. Keep on writing, practice makes you get better!
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July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, there are some grammer mistakes, but it seems promising. The biggest thing I can tell you, is to make the way they speak more in character. I will keep my eye out for this, and you should update soon!!
xoxo
Silverkitten
xoxo
Silverkitten
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July 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Poor Harry! Sooo need chapter 5!!!
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July 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I really liked this, a beautiful story! Please keep it up!
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Soooo need chapter 2!!! What is Harry going to do?
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July 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Sooo need chapter 3!!! Hope this isn't a trap!