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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Definitely one of hte better stories on here. Besides how "hot" it is, I'm really impressed with your pacing, and how you've gradually developed Cho's character. Harry, for obvious reasons, hasn't been developed as well, but I can see why, as this is a Cho-centric story. One last thing...is it too much to hope for a happy ending?
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Geez, twocanz, that was fucking brutal. First, you made me upset for Ginny, and then inspired some pretty intense feelings of hatred for my Harry. I don't think I've ever read a fic where I hated him so much in that chapter. I wanted to punch his face in. And I still don't get why he feels the need to cling to Ginny out of some warped necessity. Can't he see how he's failing both of the women in his life? Why does he think lying to Ginny's face is doing her any favors? Wow, I wasn't even this angry at him when he was in the middle of raping Cho. Maybe he really is just crazy, because his behavior doesn't make any sense.
And speaking of Cho, are you trying to kill her? Overcoming so much these last few months as she tried to make herself whole again with those tentative, imperceptible steps towards trusting Harry again; maybe enough even to give him her heart. However, that has just been dashed to smithereens and all that progress was all for naught. Why would she ever feel the need to care for him again? In fact, why is she even still protecting him? She's worried about Cormac's safety, how about she takes a trip to the Headmaster's office and tell him how Harry spent his time on the Hogwarts Express? She's reminded herself that he's highly disturbed, after all. What's stopping her? If I had been Cho, I don't think I could have even carried out that conversation when he tried to slip into her bed because I'd be vomiting too hard over the side.
Anyway, that chapter was a total buzzkill. Oh, and Ginny needs to learn how to close a fucking door properly. Bitch really likes to advertise her drama.
And speaking of Cho, are you trying to kill her? Overcoming so much these last few months as she tried to make herself whole again with those tentative, imperceptible steps towards trusting Harry again; maybe enough even to give him her heart. However, that has just been dashed to smithereens and all that progress was all for naught. Why would she ever feel the need to care for him again? In fact, why is she even still protecting him? She's worried about Cormac's safety, how about she takes a trip to the Headmaster's office and tell him how Harry spent his time on the Hogwarts Express? She's reminded herself that he's highly disturbed, after all. What's stopping her? If I had been Cho, I don't think I could have even carried out that conversation when he tried to slip into her bed because I'd be vomiting too hard over the side.
Anyway, that chapter was a total buzzkill. Oh, and Ginny needs to learn how to close a fucking door properly. Bitch really likes to advertise her drama.
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Grrr! How can you just post this chapter? You are cruel with your cliffhanger. Cho seems a bit irrational considering that she should have been able to tell he was lying to Ginny since he was trying to break up with her until she mentioned her family. Hopefully, they will be back on good terms with each other soon. Harry is likely to do something stupid and get himself killed by Tom if they don't.
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Cho seems a bit irrational considering that she should have been able to tell he was lying to Ginny
I saw your comment and felt compelled to address it, Jason. How should Cho know, though? She can't trust him. Everything he's ever said to her has to be measured against his original treatment of her the first day he raped her. Twocanz has been showing us the intense struggle Cho goes through with every endearment Harry throws her way, now that their relationship has become further complicated. Logically, all Cho really knows is that she should fear this boy. He's not stable, he's prone to violence, he's under a lot of strain, and she knows he lies. Which lie is she supposed to believe? All of his romantic professions remain fruitless if she can't base it in the truth. She's been feeling part of a fantasy, in a way, and now she feels like she's been slapped again with a hard, cold dose of reality. All of the feelings that had been plaguing her since she started to feel differently towards the Boy Hero have been held up to the light and what she's feeling is foolish. She was under a spell. In fact, I think that both Harry and Cho are in a Folie
I saw your comment and felt compelled to address it, Jason. How should Cho know, though? She can't trust him. Everything he's ever said to her has to be measured against his original treatment of her the first day he raped her. Twocanz has been showing us the intense struggle Cho goes through with every endearment Harry throws her way, now that their relationship has become further complicated. Logically, all Cho really knows is that she should fear this boy. He's not stable, he's prone to violence, he's under a lot of strain, and she knows he lies. Which lie is she supposed to believe? All of his romantic professions remain fruitless if she can't base it in the truth. She's been feeling part of a fantasy, in a way, and now she feels like she's been slapped again with a hard, cold dose of reality. All of the feelings that had been plaguing her since she started to feel differently towards the Boy Hero have been held up to the light and what she's feeling is foolish. She was under a spell. In fact, I think that both Harry and Cho are in a Folie
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I read the first chapter, and didn't think I would like it, but you actually managed to pull an interesting story out of it. Let me guess what happens next. Harry goes to Hogsmeade to spy on Cho on her date, but finds Ginny with McClaggen. By the way, are you going to have the incident where McClaggen played in the quidditch game happen in this fic?
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Well, we shall see what happens next I suppose. Harry can still take one killing curse to the person before he dies for good. I wonder what Cho would do if she saw a picture of the green light slamming into his chest in the Daily Prophet. Would she feel regret? Personally, I find the fast recovery in DH a bit of a stretch you would think that after a killing curse Harry would have had to be healed for quite some time before he could move around again. I suppose one could say it was the heat of battle that allowed him to preserve his energy until that final push. I hope you don't kill off Dumbledore. He is my favorite character....Now, is the part where I humbly ask for MOAR updates. :) I've been going crazy after that cliffhanger that was the last chapter. It is a good think you update quickly. I bet I checked 10 times today. Your story has me addicted.
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Salon_Kitty, the reason I said she should have been able to tell was that when Harry was talking to Ginny he mumbled out what was a break up line which he retracted when she brought up her parents. I'm wondering how Cho feels now that she knows Harry was coming to her to say goodbye because he may not be coming back. I wonder if she will regret her actions now that he once again chose her over Ginny that he wanted to spend his last moments prebattle with her once more. Will she now be afraid that with Harry thinking she doesn't want him anymore that Harry will go through with his plan of taking out Tom with him? For that matter, what will she think of that look Harry gave her as he was leaving? It was obvious that he cared for her to go to her, restrain himself from harming her and her boyfriend, listened to her every time she told him no, and then had the obvious pain lacing his eyes because of what she did to him yet he still tried to be with her and tell her not Ginny that he may not come back that perhaps he was coming to claim that kiss he said he would have again before he died and that she promised herself she would give to him without making him beg. How will she feel the next few days not knowing what is to come? How would she feel if she saw that picture I suggested in my previous review in the paper? Finally, how would she feel if Harry had slipped a note into her robe that said he loved her on it? Just as you said my post got you thinking when I read your post it lead to this comment.
As for my post on the previous chapter, it looks like it could be a distinct possibility that Harry will try to get himself killed this time given what Cho has done. I humbly await the next update.
As for my post on the previous chapter, it looks like it could be a distinct possibility that Harry will try to get himself killed this time given what Cho has done. I humbly await the next update.
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July 28, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I just read your story, and it is one of the best Harry/Cho fics out there. I noticed a reader brought up the term Folie
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July 27, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I'm gonna go through and review this chapter by chapter once I get a chance to sit down and read it. I'll try to do at least two chapters a week. You write so much and so fast...OK, more later, just want you to know I'm still here : )