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for The way she feels

by mitsuthenekogirl

schedule February 28, 2017 at 12:00 AM

Ok. It was a very cute story. There were alot of spelling errors, and sentence structure errors that could be fixed. More detail was needed in the chapters as they were too short and things were over before they got started. Ron was a complete ass. You've created a character that we can't help but hate. I wanted to jump in and murder him when he'd pick on Hermione! His wife as well. They are both so bitter when it was Ron's fault to begin with. Also, did you know Hermione's middle name is Jean, not Aan? I wasn't sure if that was a spelling error or not. And I can't say I like the name Cosmo, but that's just me. I hope you don't take this as a bad bad review, just constructive criticism. You've got good ideas, just need to develop more and edit.

person Anne
schedule October 6, 2012 at 12:00 AM
so i'm on chapter 20 and wanted to let you know that you are special. I don't comment often, but i needed to let you know CURSES TO YOU, i want carrots now -boo- that and i feel sorry for Hermione. I'm 16 weeks with my 2nd baby and didn't have morning sickness that bad. But so far I love you story and really want to keep reading it. whoot for all night reading sessions.
person Eliza
schedule May 7, 2009 at 12:00 AM
that was an awesome story and it was really believable.like something ppl could see happening.u r one of the best authors i've sen in my years of fanfiction.YOU SO TOTALLY ROCK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

*Liz*
person Alikat
schedule April 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
This was an amazing story. I really enjoyed it and Ron is such a jerk. Good thing Hermione has George. I thought this was very true to life as well. Good drama. The epilogue could have been a bit longer but eh it WAS twenty-something chapters so all is forgiven. Kudos and God bless!
person KellyJCR
schedule September 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Glad to see you finished, I enjoyed it. Well done.
person Anon
schedule August 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wow. This is awesome. First time reading a G/Hr story.

Anyways, can you please switch POV? Show us Ron with his whore and all crap once in a while. I want to see how they are and whatnot. It doesn't have to be long, you know? Not a chapter dedicated for them or something; just a little bit of something of them so we can read. Please update a.s.a.p!
person Jen
schedule August 25, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This is actually a pretty good story
schedule August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
A great update (see, I logged in just to tell you that:-)) a great wedding, I was a bit unsure if you would have Ron protesting to the wedding, but luckely we didn't see any of him:-)
schedule August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
xxx= 3 kisses

sorry if i confused you....thanks for updating..loved it
person KellyJCR
schedule August 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Okay I apologize for the lack of reviews but, real life has been painful. I live in Florida and the giant nightmare that was tropical storm Fay came at a most unpleasant time. We lose power and phone lines it sucks out loud. That being said I will always leave a review when I can. You toally redeemed yourself with that last chapter. By the way I am so excited that you decided to use Cosmo as the babys name. Thank for that!! Anyway looking forward to the ending. Keep pluging along your work has improved since the beginning (not that it was all that bad to begin with). Well Done!!!!!