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for Could You Love Me?

by TheSiner

person Fan
schedule March 25, 2013 at 12:00 AM
This has got to be the best story i have ever read i hope you write many
Many more
person Dacra
schedule January 1, 2013 at 12:00 AM
Hi
I very much enjoyed your story and I'm going to read the other chapters immediately. I just wanted to tell you that I really like your style of writing but sometimes it seems a bit off. I just wanted to tell you...
english is not my 1st language, so I'm not going into a rant about grammar and the like but please - please, please, please - use the little word "the" when you write about singular people/ things but aren't using their names.
example: you could say: "Harry didn't like 'Hogwarts, a history'."
If you don't want to write the names please don't say: "boy didn't like book", but "THE boy didn't like THE book."
I don't know your age, but that's toddler-speach...
that said, I'm really looking forward to the next chapter!
Bye! Dacra
person Saphira
schedule November 30, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Love the story!!!
Thought I would have liked seeing Lucius finding about Dracos pregnancy, but othervise perfect story.
person xikum
schedule June 23, 2012 at 12:00 AM
9 / 8 I love Charlie/Draco! It's perfect - the dragon-trainer and the dragon! I'm also glad that Harry returned to school, at least or a while - it is good for his self-development.
person xikum
schedule June 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
6 / 5 It is a good thing that Draco is no longer attacking Harry, and has the pureblood thing about honoring a pg spouse of his father - who is carrying his sibling - but he sure didn't act appropriately when Harry was the spouse, withoug the baby! I wish that Draco did some actual thinking - getting to know Harry, not just acting like the brat he always has been... but then, he is a teen who really hasn't had any of the pressures Harry has had, that made him miss his childhood, nearly entirely. Nice chapter! I know this is already don, but I am reading it for my first time, and responding as I go along. HOpe that's fine with you!
Side note: Please don't take offense. I see that you say English is not your first language, and with a handle like siner - is ASL or another sign language your first language? I only ask because I work with a number of deaf / HOH young children, and am learning sign now, myself. It's fascinating, but hard to learn when you are already as old as I am. sigh.
person xikum
schedule June 22, 2012 at 12:00 AM
8 / 7 I loved the ending! Yes, Harry did take it a bit too far - but then again, it was good seeing him acting / feeling himself again, that he would not take being treated like a trophy, and 'less worthy' than the purebloods. They need to reconsider their values, and hopefully this will help that along!
person xikum
schedule June 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Poor Harry - the numbness and denial. I couls see either a runaway or a suicide, unless he gets some help soon. OMG, If Ludius is a basard, Draco is the devil himself!
person xikum
schedule June 20, 2012 at 12:00 AM
I am glad that Severus saw how Harry is feeling about what happened to him with Lucius, and that Lucius saw the error of his ways. I think the direct talk would help, though not instantly... but Draco is still a jerk - did Severus see what happened with him and Harry as well? I ould hope so - and that Severus would have a very stern talkking to him - maybe have him feel what he did to Harry? That was so sick - in a mentally cruel way!
person Anonymous_fan
schedule June 7, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Thankyou very much for writing this story, its arguably my favourite harry/lucius story i've ever read <3
person Fant
schedule February 12, 2012 at 12:00 AM
Hello, I love your story, it's great!
I was wondering if you'd be ok for me to translate it in French (my mother tongue) cause I know some people (on ff.net) that wanted to read it in but they don't understood it really well in english!
Please let me know your ansewer (even if it's no I would totally understand)!
Thanks to take some of your time for reading my demand!
See 'ya, Fant