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for Original Sin

by amburnikole

person Byrony
schedule July 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Very good so far..queation though, who has the children.. Hermione or Ron?
schedule July 7, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hi Ambur, that was lovely. Oh, I can imagine what Lu is doing to Moine. Shopping with Lucius Malfoy? Oh, a dream comes true. I can't wait for that make over. And he only wants to do networking? Yeah, right. That's what he dreams about. He might not have detected himself, but he does not want Hermoine meeting other men. He will find out soon, I guess. Oh it will be delightful to read the next chapters. And Ron is a real prat! Sending her pics of the kids telling her she's a bad mother. Arsehole!
By the way - is Moine keeping the kids or will they live with their bitchy father? And how will Lucius cope with her children? Happy patchwork-family? Oh, I'm waiting to see that.
I'm sure you will have a lot in store for us. I can't wait for the update, it's getting exciting. Please update soon, soon, soon!!!!
Thank you and LOL, Alex
schedule July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i love the idea of Hermione and Lucius working together.....its a great opportunity for them to continue to grow closer. Of course Hermione was no longer happy with Ron, he was always insecure about himself and his abilities and such around Harry and Hermione and he always acted like a child in the throes of a temper tantrum. who wants to deal with that? I am intrigued to see where this story will go...

Happy Writing!

Lady B
xoxo
schedule July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Please go one with the story. I'm looking forward for the next chappy. I hope it won't be too long till you post it.
To here its been really goo. Ron as the repressing husband, Moine as the poor wife and Lucius as the saviour? OH that is promising. But I guess it won't stay that way, hm? I hope there is much more of this in your writer's head. In me you will have a faithful reader anyways.
LOL, ALEX
person carha
schedule July 6, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesting beginning. Hope you decide to continue with it. I would like to see where you take this