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for Original Sin

by amburnikole

schedule November 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Tease!!! Sooo good and then it stops. Please update soon.
schedule October 5, 2011 at 12:00 AM
one ron beat death eathers at 17 now he has training, he would be more then a match for lucius.

to you make the former death eather seem like a small think, he was a serius murder, a nazi, ron not only have every right to not have his kids around him, but legally he could get for custudy becouse of her hermoine hanging out wtih,

plus ron still a war hero, and still so he could get many people to just take lucius out,

i understand what you are trying to do, but lusis past is a big deal.

and ron not a kid, and would have more then a chance to kick lucius but.
person Lizski
schedule September 20, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Just finished Ch. 10. She's got more self-restraint than I do! I think at the point I had decided to kiss him, seriously kiss him, we wouldn't be going to bed just to sleep. But maybe that's just me! :-) Nice story - I like how you are developing the relationship of the ex-es, as well as the relationship with the children/grandchild. I look forward to more!
person Avivafae
schedule June 16, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Love this story. It's well written and the characters are very... enticing.
schedule May 28, 2011 at 12:00 AM
I really like this story, and I loved how Lucius took Ron to task (Ron bashing is some of my favourites)
person Drea1256
schedule January 10, 2011 at 12:00 AM
Can't wait to read more. I love how they both are toying with the idea of each other but won't act on it. Please continue.
schedule January 2, 2011 at 12:00 AM
This story is great! keep it up!
schedule December 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
I love your style of writing, it's so easy and enjoyable to read. I'm already looking forward to the next installment.
person Avivafae
schedule December 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
OOoo.. Love the first 9 chapters. Leaving off with a swimming chapter was brilliant. Lucius in swim trunks; just so steamy! Can't wait to read more.
schedule December 31, 2010 at 12:00 AM
Please!!!!!!!! I need to bottle Lucius essence........ LOL He is delicioso!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!