rate_review Reviews

I like your story but I do wish the chapter were a bit longer and give more detail. Don't listen to flamers they are stupid anusholes, it takes a lot of courage to write a story, so they can fuck themselves with something long and sandpapered. I get really mad when people try to put others down, so please don't listen and keep writing!!

Ignore them and keep going....Ill read ir :)

hello!!! reading your reply to flames makes me laugh. I mean ... wait this is not a flame so don't get upset with me. I never flame story if i don't like it i don't read it. wasting my time writing flames. I only has one complain. I want longer chapter please. And truly the beginning of this story is very confusing. When u said that this story looks much better in ur head that in written i said ' damn right you are'
So... Better put ur narration longer. I tried to imagine the dream sequence (first and second chapters) in my head and yes it looks much better in my imagination but the written chapters is just hollow.
It needs background scene. i get the tone of the story, mystery and greatness but the scene is less describing. I love to read detail story which bring me into a world of fantasy by reading its words. I think ur story has potential to be a good fantasy story. The idea sounds great and promising. If only you build the scene of the dream sequence and enhancing the tone. the first chapter will catch most of attentions. i did not get it until the third chapter.
Keep up the good job! i love to read a well written fantasy i have high hopes for this story hope i am not disappointed.

So far, the only thing I've been wondering about this story is when it's set. The Harry/Ginny ship didn't break up until the end of sixth year, AFTER Dumbledore died, yet he's mentioned in the story. However, I don't see any point in making a fuss until I've read more. (Plus, Weasley!Bashing! Yay!)

On the flip side, that author's note was truly disturbing: Dumbledore/Snape/Tonks? Brain bleach, please.

I could care less if there is threesome pairing or not. My flame is: Your story is terrible, the writing, the plot (What there is of it), the idea. Your writing is childish and laughable. Please stop writing such utter crap.

Worst thing Ive ever read and I have read alot of shit.

WOO HOO!!! Tell them what you really think, I think that the story is intresting and you have molly down perfectly, the one big happy weasly family idea is total bullshit!! and i'm glad that you are nipping it in the bud. as for the threeway thing I just hope that you don't make Harry Bi when he is completely into girls. but really Dumbles/Tonks/Snape that will give me nightmares.

OK Rate and Review?... 2
It's not telling us ( the readers) anything really.. please add to this. I can't remember anything I've read 2 seconds ago from your story. Don't add another chapter finish this one, please!!! and if this is going to be BI? this story doesn't belong here. This is Harry and Hermione pairing section. PLEASE PUT IT IN THREESOME OR GENERAL SECTION.

What're those? Half a page, a third of a page?
Make sure no chapter is shorter than 5 pages.

Okay, it's a good concept and I enjoy your writing style-- however your first chapter made little to no sense. While I agree that having a certain air of mystery can be well found, and is necessary in almost all stories, leaving it so vague to where the readers are actually confused is not the best approach. Also, I think you'd get higher ratings if you would actually post longer chapters-- say combine chapters 1 and 2 together, or something similar, that may help to keep a reader's interest. Just some helpful criticism! Can't wait for more!