rate_review Reviews

Looks like a promising fic! Can you e-mail me at veelagirle@yahoo.com when you update?

If you want reviews, then give something worth reviewing please. There's nothing here, you yourself even say that you have no idea where you're going with this. My advice is to next time plot your story out with an outline and write the first chapter before you post. This is complete drivel, and the only thing there is to review is the spelling, which is atrocious. Please don't waste readers' time with pointless crap like this.

I don't think that can be considered a chapter...more like half a paragraph.

wow that has got to be the shortest chapter i have ever read! i think that the summary had more information than the chapter itself. you might want to work on that