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January 14, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i hope you update this story SOON!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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January 12, 2009 at 12:00 AM
i lov this. i want more!! keep up the good work
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January 8, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Omg I am getting there. Please update soon. It's starting to look like a really good story. =)
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January 1, 2009 at 12:00 AM
Argh!!! How could you just stop there. PLEASE Write another chapter or 2 or 3, just finish the damn story alright!
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December 10, 2008 at 12:00 AM
hey could you finish this story we are waiting
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November 22, 2008 at 12:00 AM
are you going to write any more?
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October 17, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I've actually just read all of the stuff you have on here, and I love your take on the HP world. You make me giggle lots. *evil grin*
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October 4, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Interesing...very interesting.
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September 12, 2008 at 12:00 AM
oh this is so good wow! well please send me an e-mail when you post the next chapter i'm really intrested in reading what comes next.
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July 5, 2008 at 12:00 AM
I find this story very interesting, but rushed. The grammer and spelling are fine and the plot is great, but everything is just happening so abruptly. I love the idea of Harry being Draco's 'mother' and Lucius starting out as a nice little Gryffindor is refreshingly new and different. The characters lack realism, only because no time is taken to ease into new situations and feelings.
Harry and Lucius basically fall in love in an instant. It seems to me that any real person in Harry's position would have had more of a struggle to get past his previous negative experiences with Lucius. He accepted the differences in personality far to easily to be realistic and Lucius seemed to have absolutely no trouble at all dealing with a sudden influx of new memories or coming to terms with what happened, how he had changed and what he'd done since the obliviation.
I think if you could take your time to really think about and share your characters natural feelings and reactions, this could be an amazing story.
Harry and Lucius basically fall in love in an instant. It seems to me that any real person in Harry's position would have had more of a struggle to get past his previous negative experiences with Lucius. He accepted the differences in personality far to easily to be realistic and Lucius seemed to have absolutely no trouble at all dealing with a sudden influx of new memories or coming to terms with what happened, how he had changed and what he'd done since the obliviation.
I think if you could take your time to really think about and share your characters natural feelings and reactions, this could be an amazing story.