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NO NO NO NO NO NO NO MYSTRESS XOXO you are soooo bad aaaaahhhhh... ok sorry i had to get that out, well this may not be a long review but i must say first i love this chap i knew it was going to be a good one when you first told me about it... hermione and pansy in the same room nice, ok on with the review... first i loved the very beginning of this whole thing when the two girls walked in and jewel was like...'hermione..bed'... 'pansy....chair'... that was great i could just imagine them standing beside each other, not too close bc by the way they are supposed to be enemies... another funny part was when they were finding out who the others date was omg that was good and ahhh pansy and goyle... I laughed so hard when hermione and jewel had to explain a romance novel to pansy i loved the way hermione explained it she is soo funny... the great hall sounds beautiful and so do the girls dresses, and jewels present the one she wanted to unwrap everyday ahhh how sweet i can not wait to hear what draco thinks of jewels gown and i wonder what he got her.... is anyone interesting going to stop by???? hmm anyway great job on that silly chap i think you did real well in writing both pansy and hermione and they were sooo funny i bet they will actually make a real good group of friends at the end of this all....

omg you tease this chap is her b-day and you stopped right before the party....... AAAAHHHH ok so i get it if you included the party then it would be one long chap... but i say WHO CARES... ok now that i am over that i will just wait till tomm... on with the review... her presents from her parents sound beautiful, they will look great on her at the party if she decides to wear them... oh crabbe is so cute and oblivious.. here is my fav quote from him... 'He...ah... wanted me to tell you that. It has nothing to do with something he wanted to give you before he leaves neither, in case you hear otherwise.' omg i could just see the look on her face like uh huh ok crabbe.. i am not sure crabbe would be someone i would tell to keep my secrets i mean his intentions are good but he would end up letting them slip... i wonder what draco is going to get her... hopefully something meaningful or sweet either way... maybe he should get something with a protection on it where they can be in contact while he is gone... ok pansy is so funny i love her character in this i loved the part where she was 'trying to keep the mushiness to a minimum' that was funny and the ueracom what a sweet gift and she put so much meaning behind it... that was the one crutch she had. she felt that she could not trust anyone unless the emerald would shine what a sad way to live not allowing your self the freedom to trust and either get hurt or find happiness.. of course you can get hurt but that is apart of it all the hurts are what make the true friends/loves all that more meaningful... ok and jewels little trip down memory lane was sweet but the part that got me the most was when she was talking about being happy and she said (roughly) that she hoped the fates and destiny would keep her and draco together ....'because without him i never really knew the meaning of the word.' omg that part tore at my heart and just made me want her and draco to just run away and not worry about anything else that was around them... i have noticed that roses are around her a lot draco gives her a rose a day... and her favorite bath stuff is rose scented... oh and i can not wait to see what happens with hermione and pansy... that is going to be interesting.... also something i forgot that i thought was great the part right after pansy and jewel were crying and being mushy, when pansy needed to let off some steam.. that was great ...'what is she going to do' .... 'yell at someone.'.... 'who'... 'anyone that crosses her path.' that part was hysterical... ok i cannot wait for your next chap... to see what draco got jewel and how her b-day ends.....

YEAHHH Chap 12... ok sorry that it has been a while i have three chaps to catch up on but i was soo tired i had to sleep a little bit and now that i am refreshed i am ready to review so here it goes..... first off her letter from her parents, i am surprised that they are ok with her staying at hogwarts i mean they were so worried about her being in danger at hogwarts without the protection that they could give her, but maybe they have realized that Jewel can take care of herself???? You were right about Pansy she is great and definitely a spitfire, but how can she not be the people she hangs out with are slytherins and boys you kind of have to be able to hold your own... hermione she is doing it again way to obsessed over her school work, at least this time ron and harry have sent someone in there that will make her see what she is doing to herself.... ok onto draco... i am glad that Jewel stood up to him about being friends with the trio, they had to get it through their heads that she liked draco... i am glad that although he tried to tell her that whatever they said about him was not true but she informed him that she knew some of it was true, i think that is a great part bc she is informing him that she knows him the true him and she knows that people have their own opinions about him and most are negative but she is not going to let that have a hold on her feelings for him... also when she met up with him outside how cute was that when he was trying to be a better person in front of her and not let her see that side of him the one that wanted to lash out... and good for her making him express his feelings... ok here is a snippet from the chap that is way too cute "how can a girl like you, be interested in a guy like me?" aaaahhh isn't that cute makes me just want to give him a hug... what a great answer from Jewel she told him that the malfoy that he portrays is not the draco that she sees and wants to be around... this part was big for their relationship i think this will strengthen their bond... i loved it when she just said... "bullshit"... way to go Jewel give it to him :) ok now to the big part of the chap... Lucius and his eyes... jewel stated that his eyes were frozen shut... distant, secretive... why? what does he have to hide I mean really ok so he is a deatheater sure he has a lot of secrets but i am not sure that is all it seems that there is a reason like something that has happened to him in the past that has made his eyes frozen and as Jewel said your eyes are the gateway to your soul... why is his soul so frozen what has happened to him... hmmm maybe his dad was killed before his eyes??? i mean that would make me a cold person... he is distant to his own son maybe he does not want his son to have to hurt like he has in the past... i mean by distancing himself he is hurting draco worse but we all have our own reasons for the way we do things and they may be misguided but at the time they are the only thing we can think of to do...... ok the raven hellloooo what a big part and i even sneaked to the chap with her, draco, and the raven... ok so why does it seem like the raven is spying for lucius what is he looking for .... hmmm i wonder ok so i have my ideas on this and knowing my luck i will skip over to the next chap and be wrong BUT i am still sharing my idea here it goes... ok in her dream (i am unsure of the chap #) the raven was circling overhead as if it wanted to be followed(her words) why?? was the raven calling to her or to someone else perhaps its owner?? also in the current chap the raven was watching them, for how long and why when they noticed it and draco recognized it did it fly away was its job to stay unseen, was the raven there to spy on draco or more importantly Jewel... I am thinking Jewel... really it all kind of fits lucius was quizzing jewel about her going to hogwarts and the conversation between jewels mom and dad about someones dad being killed in front of his sons eyes, and all of a sudden his raven is spying at hogwarts i think that lucius wants to know what she is up to and i think that having draco in the mist of it is an added advantage and i am not sure lucius will be to happy about it... you can tell by the look in dracos eyes when he saw the raven he was angry why? bc he probably knows what his dad uses the raven for and draco was confused why? because he does not know why his father would need to have his raven at hogwarts of course he will probably assume that the raven is there for him i am not soo sure... now that his father has seen draco with her you can bet lucius will be trying to get as much info from draco as possible...

ok so like i said i was wrong about the raven well at least in the fact that he was not there to spy on draco completely just to tell him that his dad wanted to see him... and something that draco said caught my attention the raven never stays to far from his master... hmmm what does that mean well obviously in Jewels dream it means that daddy dearest was near, and what does that mean??? well I have no idea???? i just love the way you are writing this relationship with draco and jewel i know i know i say that a lot but really i do every time i read them together in a chap i just love it... i mean really they just technically met they would not be humping each other when he got inside her room of course there was some sexual tension duh but they did not give in to it, it is not the time can they really say that they know each other enough to make that step i mean sure Jewel can read what is going through his mind or more so emotions but that still does not make up for the time they need together to be at that point... i loved it when draco scared the hell out of Jewel when he was flying and popped into her view ok so what did we learn from his impromptu visit well he has to go home for the holidays bc his dad insists but his dad will not be there why what does he have to do?? his dad is acting strange since when? has he been like that since before he saw jewel or is this something that happened since he saw her i mean she looks like cassie and IF he is the one that saw his dad being killed by cassie then of course he would be weird now seeing her it brought back way too many old forgotten feelings... ok so draco is worried that he will have to make a life or death decision for his dad i have to say that i thought that too i mean we are unsure who this could be but it could be his dad although i am not so sure... i think that the dream jewel had with the raven and draco being hurt has something to do with this life and death decision he will have to make and another thing why was jewel being pulled away from him in the dream what does that mean??? and was she really herself if not her who was she??? oh god i am adding more questions to my puzzle... oh and love the draco/jewel action in this esp when she caught on to his emotions that was funny.. and a promise for some interesting moments after her birthday... way to go on another great chap love it on to the next......

hmmm... ohh you are sneaky... you make this a chap about quidditch, make the reader think that all jewel will be doing is watching draco and seeing the game for the first time but then you throw in lucius how very sneaky trying to catch us the reader by surprise well good job but HA your plan is ruined i am prepared for you..... ok lets start at the beginning.... it was sooo funny to read the part where ron called hermione hunny bunny that was cute and then to hear that hermione calls him cherry lips oh my god that was sooo funny when i first read the title i thought ok maybe a cute make out scene with draco but i never thought that would be rons nickname.... omg i laughed so hard at that point... ok so you gave us another little snippet of her old school.... i loved the part when draco said he was the best and jewel says 'the best huh?'... and draco says 'you know it..' oh my that part made me all gooey ok so the game was great i love how draco had crabbe walk jewel to the game how sweet and the poor thing had scratch marks from all the excitement of the game how funny... ok so here is the big part of the chap that you tried to hide at the end you know so we would not catch it very cute... (i am only teasing).... ok lucius with his bird i am beginning to think there is more to that bird than meets the eye... ok first he was awful interested in what jewel was doing over the holidays... why what does he have planned.... so he is going to see a friend hmmm i wonder who that could be, so i am not sure but why does this little statement make me feel that he is not going to see a friend but maybe someone that he knows in maybe a less than pleasant way... is he going to end up in paris??? and jewel got to see a little more of his emotions at least the ones that he was unable to hide... he knew that draco would tell her whether what he said was true or not ok well what does that say.... it screams that lucius knows about them being together, how does he know did draco tell him if so what was said and what was not said???? i have a feeling that her dream/visions are all going to come together over the holiday season... hmmmm ok i am anxiously waiting for your next chap... i hope that i did not miss anything.....

hey its me i got away to read chap 5 or at least the dream to see if my memory is correct and obviously NO it is not... ok it seems to be outside got that, the sun darkening, the boy sneering and it aging him, she wanted...... woooooo wait a minute.... she was cassies sister in this right!!!! I mean why else would she cry out to cassie, the boy, hmmm ok so he is able to use the crucio curse or at least that is what i think she was describing... his face was aged when he sneered at her, hmm..... ok why am i finding it hard to believe that the guy who killed cassies sister is not the one that they took to azkaban???? the sun darkening, the sun darkening???? why do i have a feeling that lucius has info on this I mean he may not have done it or anything but why do i feel like he knows or at least can help fill in the puzzle pieces.... ok sorry if that was jumbled i am typing as i am thinking since i am still at work and not really 'supposed' to be on this, ok hmm interesting... ok well i am going to try and sneak a peek at your now 2 chaps that you have posted here goes nothin!!!!! i will try to review if i can only read i promise to review each chap on tues:) oh and another thought i think that all of these vision/dreams are connected how??? only you know that and you ain't tellin

AAAAAHHHHH i do not even know where to begin..... ok i need a minute to organize my thoughts.... love this story by the way have i told you that... ok some mindless thoughts here... isn't draco just yummy omg i mean really. oh and ron and hermione so cute... ok on with my review.... ok dracos reading was very interesting no wonder why Jewel was nervous when it came to his final reading, bc it means something for her besides him... I think that their connection is deep i feel that it will in the end help her to improve her own 'seeing', like he is her missing link, sorry i had too ha ha.... I think that he will be needed somehow in the grand design of this story i am not sure how to explain it but after reading this chap i feel like when jewel seeks her answers for some of her questions, i think that draco will be there to help in more than the cute adorable way, more of a hands on or mind on way.... i am not sure if that makes sense really because while this chap helped a ...little... bit with my puzzle it still leaves me with a LOT of unanswered questions and honestly i think i have added a few more to that list.... ok i think that is all of my random thoughts now onto the review of the actual chap....ok ok ok dracos reading you did not disapoint( ok so i spelled that wrong whatever :)....) ok so Jewel had this overwhelming feeling to be touched right, is this something from him or something that she is feeling for herself.. you know like in earlier chaps when someone was having a particular emotion in a 'flashback' then so would she... i am not sure that this is JUST a draco feeling i think it is her too she wants nothing more then to feel another person touching her just touching her without all that extra jazz... but i think so does draco well not anyone i think he longs to feel her you know i mean he is the only one to notice anything about her gloves... ok this may be long but i do not know how else to get my thought across... here it goes... dracos first reading after jewel saw him with all the girls he was ashamed and they stated that he was looking for something that he has yet to find, OK... current reading... after it was over jewel asked if he never felt that feeling before and he stated no... ok now to my thought... he is looking for something in all those girls a feeling for him to know it is right... welll I think that was the feeling you know it was a passionate feeling a need and i think that was what he was looking for and i think when he and jewel do get together then he will feel it again and so will she you know like a spark or something??? bc what he is looking for lies in her... ok ok big stuff here the life or death omen future thing helloooooo is this about her i am leaning towards yes just because of the heart with the arrow... you know love over pain... it was telling him that even if it seems bleak that love will conquer for him... and i think i like that.. but really what is going to happen to cause this decision?? could his father play a part in this i know i know i think i am just grasping at straws but still?? ohhhh and you know how i said last chap about the killer not being a death eater, ok i just thought of something and this may or may not be linked but the one second thought that jewel had when seeing dracos dad i am not sure of the correct wording but 'he is a death eater... i am not sure why i need to know that...' i think i have stumbled onto something BUT WHAT i feel that it is connected somewhere but where and that is another one of those things that i pushed aside bc you the author made it a small moment but i am learning with you that those are the big moments... although you have just stuck your hands on my puzzle and shuffled the pieces a bit butttt that is ok i will work more on it maybe your next chap will help with that... huh:).... ok on to my favorite moment ... as he is walking out... i love that you have her sooo honest with him it is so frustrating sometimes to read a story where the girl is aloof sometimes it works but not in this and that is why you rock... 'you know jewel I would wait forever for you....' omg seriously i am goo again damn it... really your kicking my ass here... ok that is just... sigh...great... and the rose yep i loved it... 'always'... ok on with the show hermione and ron... aren't they just cute... i loved this part it made me laugh... harry-- 'it's been nice... hermione hasn't complained at all today about anything..' i laughed so hard.... ohh and the party that is going to be great and if the potion works it could have a happy ending.... a little smooch hint hint... ok so yeah i totally loved this chap hated that it had to end because i wanted more answers but i knew you were going to tease me... until next time.... :)

OMGOMGOMGOMGOMGOMG!!!!!!!! yeahhhhh that was good, well you built us up to it and you did not let us down... ok so first... the dress sounds lovely, i bet she will take dracos breath away... I am so glad that she is able to have classes now that way she will see draco more hopefully.... i am so glad you had sibyll in this honestly she is such a loon but i like that you gave her a purpose.... I can not believe it worked that was great i bet draco was like what the hell is going on when she drug him through the great hall... oh and she called to him with her mind... hmm i wonder can she do that with anyone else, maybe but i do not think so or at least not in that magnitude... ok so she finally got to kiss him and see how talented he is at that, oh and that feeling the one from the reading yes yes i was kinda right on part of it really i guess :) oooohhhhh i just remembered what i forgot from the e-mail... ok so dracos reading you know the omen part... ok last review i said that it would be jewels life that he had to decide but i am not so sure right now that that is the case... i am not sure who it could be or what but i just do not think that it will be her at least that is my thought at this moment, now i think she will have something to do with it... oh i do not know i am confusing myself ok back to this chap... i love that she asked him to be her date to the party i love that she is forward with him it is a nice change... oh and his little statement ... 'i wouldn't mind feeling that again'... i bet he wouldn't i would not mind reading it again... all i can say is good for jewel... i bet she gets a dozen roses in the morning.... ok really great chap as usual i can not wait for your next happy writing..... fab job you rock and all that jazz... love ya...... *hugs* ok i am going to try to rate this story i am not sure how to do that but i see that option is there so here goes nothing....

yahhhhh i am doing a happy dance ok first as i was laying in bed last night i could not sleep so as usual my mind wandered to your stories and i think i caught on to something that i forgot about when i posted my review... in this story jewel believes that cassies sister was killed by death eaters, but i do not think so i think that is what jewel was told because, 1. it is easy to push something like that onto death eaters bc that happened a lot around then and jewel would not second guess it, and 2 that lie is probably easier to take than the truth???? and i am leaning towards the latter i think that whoever killed cassies sister was someone close to cassie???? maybe???? ok onto my chap review i hope i do not forget anything there is so much i want to say.... how sweet is draco i mean really the roses i am becoming goo again thanks a lot... i love him in this story love love love him i can not wait till they become a couple, ok when she is looking at him in the great hall she states he always seems to know when she is looking at him, and he looks at her... well i think that is another big sign that they are connected or he is 'feeling' her? the kiss from her wand was sweet i like their relationship in this you know big bad slytherin is supposed to be tough blah blah blah it is great that they do not care yeah for them... ok on a sorta side note her first day to class jewel said --roughly-- by examining yourself and what is inside of you, deep dark secrets, hidden hurts, etc..., it makes you stronger.... i think that is another reason that draco can 'feel' jewel i think he is examining himself thus becoming more entuned with his ownself and thus with her and their connection.... ok hermione 2 full books for her journal why am i not surprised she never does anything half way, but it is obvious from her first reading that she excels at schoolwork bc she can make it accept her when she does not feel accepted socially she clings to her brains because of her insecurity... does that make sense i know what i mean but i am not sure that it is coming out...yeah for jewel giving ron and hermione a swift kick in the ass... i loved that part about time.... ok i love jewel explaining her feelings for draco and how he is unwavering when it comes to her.... that was big not only for ron and hermione but i think for her too she needs to know that he is not giving up on her somehow i feel like that will be important later maybe?? yahhhh the potion is early oh i hope that this helps i really want her and draco to be together.... ok the nervousness that means something.... something is about to happen and i think it is going to be not just a reading of draco but also jewel... she keeps saying that cassie could read her but i think that draco will tooo not that he is receiving the gift of sight but i think that maybe it is the closeness with her... i am not sure if this is the right direction but this is the way i am being led... ok i feel like we are on the edge of a big moment here and we are just hanging... i cannot wait for your update... and as always an absolutely perfect chap!!!!!!!!

ok i do not even know where to begin so how about the beginning... ok your authors note was great i cannot wait to read the complete chaps of this story... I really like a lot of these stories on aff but the one that develop their own characters that are thrown into the harry potter world is great and a little possible romance with draco is good as well......i doubt that you really need a beta bc i can not even read any errors of course i am not really looking i am a little caught up in the chap... ok on with the review... the dream at the beginning..hmm... is it something that happened in the past or future (((thinking to myself))) i want to lean towards a possible future account.. i think that her feeling his pain means some sort of connection between her, in the dream, and him if she was draco or experiencing something that happened to him then she would BE him, and not beside him, like she was with cassie... hermione in the class ha ha --call me, call me-- how very hermione... that part reminded me of the dr. doolittle movie with eddie murphy... throw the ball... throw the ball... sorry that had me giggling.... ohh and the part with seamus was sooo funny where his mind runs faster than hers, i never thought of that but i bet it is funny the difference in each persons mind, sounds like an overactive pomeranien... hermiones reading opened up a lot about her i mean it is obviously implied in the books but you gave us a real picture to look at.... ok now about harrys reading i like the way that you kept it as a short part of the chap, yes i know this is the harry potter story but YOUR story is about jewel and draco with harry and crew in the background and i love how you told about his reading but you did not make it an overwhelming part, as harry has had to self examine his own life/choices for so long that he is probably one of the easier reads because he has already seen all of this.. hermione and ron at lunch i have the same reaction as jewel, they have the same reading about each other and they are avoiding the elephant at the lunch table... ok again to my fave parts.. pansy.. i know that we are supposed to hate pansy i mean in the books world but i like her in this story, you have given her layers like the rest of the slytherins, her reading has given us some insight on why she is the way she is, and why she has attached herself to guys like draco and others i am sure, she is looking for them to make her feel good about herself when martin did so much to ruin her own view of who she is, that reading was big for her bc it helped her to look at herself as an outside person would.. and i am glad that she is giving up on draco... and now on to draco... his reading was great i mean i think these are things that we the reader knew but things that jewel needed to know, dracos insight on his relationships was big at least for him to see that he is actually searching for something, and that something i think is jewel i was getting a feeling that that part was a possible hint to the fact that draco and jewel are needed to complete each other, and maybe just maybe the pain she feels when seeing her loves with others may be lost with draco i mean after they finally decide to be with the other... i think the biggest part of this chap happened when jewel allowed draco to see a little of what she goes through that i feel will bind their relationship... but the big question what will each student learn from this? something that will make them stronger and come into their own selfs.... ok great chap i am on to the next... oh my a long review.... on another note i think that the storyline you have set up for each of us is going to be great as you have said you have hinted in earlier chaps and we have seen some more of you hinting we just have to read between the lines awesome job!!!!!!!!