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by sugypunk

person kazfeist
schedule August 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Wonderful chapter, Sug! But I'll PM you about a couple typos, yeah? Poor Hermione! I hope the parents won't take legal recourse...or is that how the rest of the story is going to go? :D
person kazfeist
schedule August 2, 2008 at 12:00 AM
Hello! I tried to find your email addy, but you've got it hidden. Anyway, in Ch 12, you have 'it's prey' instead of 'its prey' (where Draco's on the bed with her) and you have 'studnets' instead of 'students' right at the very end. I would have sent this privately, but I couldn't. Can't wait for the rest! :D
schedule August 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
No way that was your first sex scene, NO WAY! *standing ovation*
schedule August 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
wonderful chapter!!!
keep up the great work!! cannot wait for the next one!
schedule August 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*hands you a Draco sized and shaped cookie*



See? I can be nice sometimes. LoL

Excellent chapter, dearest. I look forward to seeing how Draco and Hermione interact when they meet again.

*swoon*
schedule August 1, 2008 at 12:00 AM
That was an insane chapter, Hotttt lemon, the chemistry between your characters is very well designed, and i just cant help wonder what will be the headmistress' reaction to these two getting love dovey. I hope Hermione handles it well, she has been known to over think things and make alot of mistakes in her choices. But so far so godd, Please keep up the good work, and please keep the updates rolling.
schedule July 26, 2008 at 12:00 AM
This story is sweet, and has alot of drama and potential, so please keep the raw emotion coming as well as the chapters, and keep up the great work. Update soon.
person nekopilot02
schedule July 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i really like this story, the plot is nicely and spicy-ly (totally not a word) written though i rue the cliff hanger in chpt. 11 T.T, Draco and Hermione stay true to the books yet have unique mature quality to them. altogether wonderful ^.^
person Anon
schedule July 20, 2008 at 12:00 AM
i think u should update like now lol
but yeah i cant wait till u do
schedule July 19, 2008 at 12:00 AM
*sniffle*


How sad! I definitely didn't see the death part coming. How sad! MOST is forgiven...until next chapter. Then we'll see if you get life sized Draco cookies or not. LoL!!!